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Maybe you should make the main character have a faction to rule.
Can you make it an au of marvel. It is where the main character rules Sparta, and Sparta still existing in the modern age.
This is an excellent story. I Like how you used a non reincarnated main character. I also like how he isn’t overpowered nor from a repeated wizarding family used in other fanfics. I also like how his growth rate is realistic.
Please don’t add anyone else into aciel’s harem. Maybe you should just make him have kids with scathach and aife. Also, maybe you should make it that if there is anyone left from the house of bune, they should all be with aciel in his dragon mountain. Finally, please don’t make the main character lower his status and be more involved with the dxd canon like the other generic dxd fanfics, but be unique in itself.
This is a great story. For future references perhaps you can make a couple more yautjas have a little more human features as the main characters romance that I’ve seen in your tags. But don’t make the added yautjas a reincarnated person. Please don’t make the story be generic as the MC is having relationships on earth and them wanting to be connected to the characters. Perhaps you can make the main character have more yautja personality with with a little of his previous personality but make him a little more ruthless. Maybe you can make the main character have a more leadership role for his race in the near future.
This is an excellent story. I like how you created a different type of Harry Potter who isn’t connected to snakes, but to ravens. I hope you create more chapters, and maybe try to created a more informed wizard world background as the setting.
This was a great chapter. I loved how you made the mc a vampire. I hope the story isn't particularly focused on Japan in the future. I also hope that the Mc gasper, and Valerie don't join a devil peerage. But the Mc creating his own faction of everyone of vampire blood. I appreciate that you didn't make the mc the typical beta mc, where he wants to follow canon, be involved in it, or creating a harem like the other typical fanfics. Please don't let him be involved with the devils, particularly Rias Gremory. I definitely don't particularly like her! Please include pictures of the mc and other characters either on a separate page, or on chapters as the the story goes. Maybe both.
This was a great chapter. Perhaps you should add the background of Andrew Charlus Potter, like where he attended school, personality, and what magic he is good at. Including his associates. I hope you include details from beyond Britain's magical society, such as the species their, and what other magical societies in different countries are there. You should add pictures for what the characters in the story look like.
Let him live somewhere else besides Britain.
agreed