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But thanks for the feedback 😊 I'm not really surprised I got it completely wrong 😂😅

Love the chapter and foreshadowing! A bit confused on the whole vampire-werewolf thing, and I'll keep reading to find out! Are both the Alessandro's and the Sullivans werewolves? Are they vampires? I have so many questions! Love the story and plot so far!

I also saw the vampire and werewolf tags, but I'm confused as to who's what. Earlier in her dungeon dream, it mentioned that the other people didn't like her blood, so I thought that they would be the vampires and she would be a werewolf. It also talked about silver chains/wires being used to restrain and cut her, so I assumed that she was a werewolf. Plus, silver hair seems more like a vampire thing to me.

I love how real this story is, and how she deals with her trauma in such real ways. Her thoughts and reactions really show depth to her character and her story.

Still want to punch him

Maybe you could change the sentence to "Me and the jerk beside you..." instead of using 'I'. Just a small suggestion to make it flow a little better.

I stopped reading this a while ago to wait for more chapters and avoid cliffhangers every time it was updated, and I'm just rereading this so I remember. I'd forgotten how often I want to punch Mark for being a jerk.

I love this little paragraph! It's so true!

Or maybe "No one ever wanted a broken little child in their lives... unless they wanted to break it more" Also just a suggestion It would make it sound just a bit cleaner, and still be more casual than formal.