A Guy with many great ideas, but is too lazy to write them.
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Thank you for the chapter, yet I wonder if the Beast will come out in the following Chapters.
Could he inhabit Gabriels human body. He was an Archangel, so is holding one of the strongest Graces. If he could do that, he has his perfect Vessel.
Thank you for explaining. And cool that he has someone like the beast but different.
Could you give a hint to whom the shattered Glass person is? It's not him, is it? Is it someone like the beast from Split? Also, thank you for the chapter.
Sorry If I didn't specify what I meant. I meant the fight against the normal Heroes. It was shown that he had enough power to stop the dragon and fight in close combat. So why did he only warp and not dodge.
Yeah, that wasn't it, chief. If Horizon was such prodigie in fighting, which you have said and shown, why wouldn't he only warp if truly neccecary. I don't know, just really disappointing in how the Story turned in the last few chapters.
I read this Story and have some good and Bad things to say. The first and most important thing is, don't make excuses because you have ADHD. Sounds quite shitty, and it is, but I am also diagnosed with it (I was a child, when it was identified) and I bet there are a lot of Author who have the same thing, so don't make excuses for that. Now it's time to criticize your Story. 1. Your randomness, you, broke the immersion in your on Story to explain as an Author why something is why it is.(Like U.A being a University and not a School) by which you shoot in your foot. Try explaining something inside your Story. 2. Now I am going to sound old, but the use of curse words, try to keep them minimized your do something like (He overestimated his strength so he couldn't block the Punch and the force sent him flying, he cursed at his Stupidity for Overestimating himself.) Something like that. Everything else was okay. You don't need to be a pro at writing have fun and try to improve yourself and if you have more fun reading than writing, that also okay. So maybe you will read my rand, or maybe not, still have a wonderful day.
I feel your pain with the writing, I daydream a lot and have quite of a lot of different Ideas, yet I doubt myself. My biggest weakness is I try to make the character/ characters perfect so that hey aren't an OC or OCC yet, I always think that I did it wrong. I think you should try to write. I will read this Story and come back and tell you what I think about it. Before I do that, the thing you said about the Ideas leaving as soon you sit down, attempt to make some notes on your Phone and the more notes you have the more Story you could do with it. Until later, have a wonderful day.
They never learn their lesson.
I quite like it, the Moon Knight/ Split (Movie) personality thing. The Story itself is also quite good. At least better than about 90% of the other stories on this Website. If I could give you some advice if you haven't posted this story on other Fanfic websites do, like Spacebattle, Fanfic.net (even though the website is a pain to navigate) sufficientvelocity etc. because I have seen at least several dozen stolen works on all of them. Your story has Potential, so make an account on them and post them also there, before somebody else does that. Keep up the good work and have a wonderful evening, that extend to all who have read my rambling.