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what? are people with memory loss supposed to run around screaming? peace comes from acceptance. he probably accepted it because it literally hurts to remember
at this point, it's just funny to spot the words vampire royal or vampire anything. it's used too often 🤣
with it being a half mask... what part of her face is burned? the mask covers her eyes and right cheek. does her mouth stick out? does part of her forehead stick out? 🤔
am I mixing stories? I thought her mom was a chef?
girl, bite your finger and leave a blood trail!
shark fin soup is a prime example
-English is probably not the authors first language. they would definitely benefit from an editor. currently the text is jarring with all of the typos- not misspelled words but the wrong words or word endings. - the chapters and story are average at chapter 3. nothing really stands out as unique other than the name Halora. essentially it just seems like popular copy and paste but the writing is more on the side of average than good. oh, and the FL seems to have a randomly selected phobia- there's probably a reason later, but at this point it feels randomly selected. - the only world building that's happened so far is descriptions of people's clothes which I don't think really matters since scenes and days change so quickly.
that was a long 2 seconds 🤣
lol, teenage moments 🤣
aw, her mind went straight to babies! 🥰
he starting kissing her vs he was starting to kiss her, perhaps?
*does contain rape* this is like a spin off basically except it's 1 guy mainly for the love interest (maybe 2), the clothing is more revealing, oh and before chapter 30 theres straight up rape. some people, like myself, find rape to be a complete turn off in a story. I was enjoying the ML and FL's relationship before this as it was way better than its sister comic (in theme and world, but not authors) in that the 1st ML isnt stupid and childish- now I'm leaving without finishing the story. annoying? yeah. there should have been a warning label. the art style is risqué but amazing none the less. comparing the world building and character development to the sister story.... this one kind of just stays in one area with outside elements coming in to progress the story. the sister story is more of a traveling to progress the story. there was a system for the FL to grow, but the dialog served more as noise than important information. the sister story to this had a leveling system for the males and some cultural beliefs from the author put in as markers for beauty. I mean both stories aren't set up for a deep thought process from the reader so character development would be quite hard to pull off in the long run. this one was definitely designed for eye candy over chapter/character progression. thanks for the read before the rape- bye
chippy vs chipper. both could be right, but I usually see chipper :)