Baqua

Also I forgot to mentioned about your habit of dropping novel, maybe because of block you can read other eavesdropping concept to refresh your creativity

So as this concept is interesting to me I decided to read more of this type of content. So I learned that most of them are mtl and barely readable so reading is kinda refreshing. Even though there is some minor grammatical mistakes, my brain automatically translate it into proper sentences after reading too many novel/fanfiction (I need to really touch some grass). So here is my review, Writing Quality - 4, need some improvements on pronouns and in spellings but overall still readable. Story Development - 5 , I'll give this a 5 for now may change my review later on if the author fxcked up his novel by repetitive concept and just ruined the story. But for now seeing the concept is new and interesting (for me) and the other protagonists being a regressor or a reincarnator is good (again hope it will not be repetitive. Character Design - 4 , here me out, while Qin Tian is quite good there is some flaws that he still reveal. For example him forgetting his rewards from the system, which I thought he will remember if it will be needed in future events so I will not nitpick it too much unless you forgotten about writing about it author. The heroines's personality are also kinda deviate from their canon personality but I don't really care too much about since I just think of it as an AU. I guess the only problem I can think of is the other protagonists attitude, like there are too much bashing on them, like too many disgusting thoughts that causes the heroines's to develops disgust to them and developed more favorable thoughts on Qin Tian which is okay but if it happens again again it will be to boring and cause many people to dropped so I advice the author to take note of that. I suggest that you should add protagonists with brain, like they may thought some lustful things but they can also thought their own storyline future/past to earn their own heroines interest so these will lead to 2 routes. 1, is that Qin Tian 's heroines will fight with the protagonist heroines. And like that it will be a refreshing breeze to us reader since not all heroines will be inlove with Qin Tian and not all times it will be easy on him since it's the protagonist with brain who uses the future knowledge to his advantage. 2, the other protagonists will hide some things from his heroines or treat them like tools which the heroines will know since they can hear his thoughts. Also since it's like this it can complicates things and Qin Tian can blurt out some events from their storyline which will earn the heroines trust, but of course he should have a higher time dealing with the protagonist to showcase the rest of his powers. Because imagine the protagonist losing to Qin Tian because they have no brains. Updating Stability - 5 , pretty standard atleast 1 chapter a day which is good but standard. It will be good if the author can set some power stone goal. At some point although the story is interesting with the rate of 1 chapter per day, some reader will decide to stockpile on the chapters and just let it sit for a while and completely forget about it since it happened to me sometimes (only for me don't know about the others ) so with the stone's goal you can use it as a motivation to create more chapters to release more chapters to us readers. I know creation is hard so take your time, I know it's ironic lmao. World Background - 5 , is very interesting so I hope you don't fxcked it up

fml why did i read this in sanji's accent, " Luna-chwan"

i checked this fanfiction again after seeing the chapters cuz i swear i thought i was tripping cuz it's been a long time since this last updated.

n*gga, racist, super racist, ultra racist ,super ultra racist, super super sheesh

Why bother posting the story here if you didn't even bother translating it or fixing it's grammar. Also it bothers me that you didn't even credited the original author or atleast in the description mentioned the link for the original.

it's not translated at all, this person just copied it from the raw lmao

As a person that read countless fanfictions, I would like to edit your chapters if you want. Usually, even if the premise of your story is good, if your grammar is not that good many people will drop your novel because it ruins their reading experience. Even me, I'm currently reading chapter 3 but the grammar made me come here to criticize the grammar. This story looks good but the grammar is seriously ruining it, so if it's okay to you I would really like to edit your chapters grammatical errors.

chapter doko?

that is before, it's mentioned +10 and there is no minus unless the previous -5 is counted