thatotherguy008

Why does this keep happening?!

Gunslinger is obviously wrong. For the love of GOD can we get a human proofreader?!

What about pill lightning?

Is there a human out there to proofread?

This book needs a human proofreader.

Can we get a human proofreader!?

Overall: Good! The pacing is SLOW. This isn’t a bad things, but you need to know before going in. You can skip the first 20 chapters or so, but after that it is quite interesting. The writing, editing, proofreading, and structure are good with minimal errors. The internal logic is consistent, which is probably the most significant aspect of this good review.

“Learning new skills after ascension is impossible”? He got a spear that he will never be able to use proficiently. That seems like something that won’t hold true later.

It comes in response to a NEED not a DESIRE. -Goku

Show, don’t tell. Describe how someone says something instead of telling us their emotions after they say it.