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Based on what's written so far, it's clear that a lot of effort went into creating this story. There is a substantial emphasis on world building and the characters are well made. The flow of events is somewhat logical, decently written, and grows more interesting with each chapter. Overall, the story has great potential and is worth reading.

Favorite characters so far are Shogo and Lloyd, love their carefree attitude and their powers. The world of the story itself is engrossing as well even though it’s only been a few chapters but so much is being said in the background and I love that type of world-building.

This novel focuses on character development and background description. While reading it, I often felt like I was in the scene itself. I would recommend this novel to people who like fantasy as it takes you to their world while you’re reading it.

A promising start for what's (hopefully) to come. A short rollercoaster that doesn't have any slow points yet has plenty of downhill sections to keep you engaged. Characters are well defined even if a lot of them fall into tropes and they have a nice dynamic. The world is pretty interesting but it remains to be seen how it'll be explored and expanded upon. Overall, it's a fun ride and a promising start that could lead into a more fleshed out series and if that happens then I'll be there for it

The story, though short, is very immersive and the transition of the scenes and dialogue is smooth. The world-building is also clear and descriptive, while not affecting the flow of the story. It is a very interesting and satisfying read. The characters are also great. They are fleshed out nicely and drives the reader to know and understand them more. I highly recommend it! I only lament the fact that it's short.

It's clear that the author has put a lot of thought into writing the story. Even though it's a one-shot, the world building is on par with some more well known light novels. The characters are well made, and the events seem to hint that something twisted will happen. Overall, I am interested to see what happens next.

while the 2nd half kinda divulges into faster pacing and doesn’t have that magic of the first half much, this story has mad talent and opens up possibilities for new stories. writing is there but again it’s weakened in the 2nd half and could use a little work. everything is still solid.

this was really interesting to read, the concept of writing as magic was very cool. zoe is a very cute character i love her character design, she reminds me of umaru doma a little bit

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