Naruto: The Shinobi Traverser

You should add tag VILLAIN for : >killing innocent childern just for experiment >killing innocent clan shinobi for personal gain

a nice change of pace from the usual op self-inserts keep up the good work author. ill change this rating as the story progresses but i doubt i will need to.

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I mean it's a pretty one-dimensional story. The MC almost feels like a non-existent puppet; he feels bland. There's no depth to him. Whereas the plot and everything else is also the same. Boring and bland. It's just an MC born as a civilian—an orphan and works his way up. There's hardly an struggle, MC learns things very easily. No explanation to it or anything. Also MC is power-hungry and opportunistic which was unique but there was no substance to it. I like this type when there's character to them. Good thing is, author is very in tune with Naruto and knows a lot of things—so he can come up with a lot of ideas and creative things. The writing is fine; the grammar and punctuation is fine but author needs to close dialogues and thoughts properly. Also there's no exposition or detail in the writing which makes it even more bland. Stop doing this- 'I will go here' But do this- 'I will go here.' Don't do this- "Come with me" Do this- "Come with me." ***

no romance sealed the deal for me, excited to see where this goes

It’s good, I hope you don’t drop. Filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler filler