Needs Improvement

My mentor gave his first feedback for my first chapter today. It was a short one.

"Overall, the piece is an improvement. The introduction of the Sorcerer actually caused a slight chill at the birth scene. The piece needs refinement Structurally and with Diction, but it is a vast improvement of direction. That is an introductory piece. I need to let it stew more and read it a final time, but, well done."

I'm really glad to read it but I'm back at work. A lot to consider with this story. World background, dual timelines and on how to connect them. I'm a bit frustrated for daring to write such an intricate piece. The funny thing is that this feeling of frustration became a familiar thing to me, from my first story, then followed by the difficulty of writing my second book, which was a historical story. It became a sign to me that I need to go out and relax and not to give up.

I don't know what else to say. I want to write something funny since the previous chapters where so dramatic and serious. The truth is I want to write comedy stories but I don't know if I'm really cut out for it. Working on the comedic part of my IGMB was not easy.

Anyway, I need beta readers for my new book. If any of you is willing to be one, just leave a message here. No salary but only the privilege to read first.

Thank you.

Have a good and fruitful day.