Liking the story so far.
It is the first of this genre that I have read that has potential, and for this app, the quality of the book is pretty high.
Writing quality: 3*
It is easy to understand what the author wants to express, but there are a lot of problems, such as:
- A lot of unnecessary capital letters.
- Incorrect sentence syntax.
- Paragraphs sometimes split in the middle of a sentence.
- Missing words (very rare).
- Repetitive sentences (which have improved since I pointed it out in one of the chapters).
Story Development: 4*
It could be better, but there is a clear progression of the story. If the writing improves, I believe this aspect will become much more impactful.
Character Design: 4*
I don't give it 5* because we still don't have much information about his wives (except Janice) and kids. Since the author has shown intention to give more value to his family, I think this aspect will be addressed in the future.
Updating stability: 5*
Very good, almost daily.
World background: 4*
As it is still the beginning of the story, some information is missing, but the author has been introducing it in a way that doesn't feel like an info dump.
To improve the story, the author could consider adding an auxiliary chapter with information known to the general population and other important aspects, such as:
- World Map:
It can even be created on paint, just to help provide a clear view of the world and assist the author in planning the story's progression, such as mountains, rivers, dangerous places, etc.
- Strength Tiers
- Characters: With the number of children and wives, it will be important to provide:
- Name
- Age
- Relation with MC
- Potential in magic and martial arts
- Profession
- Strength
- Techniques they know
