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2024-07-24 08:37

I have read it till chapter 92 or so, the overall story is promising, with a little more huff!! it will be better, the reason being that some of the background of the character/ characters is/are not well put together. and the author as a way of repeat the same thing in paragraphs, i mean after the author gives an information, the next two paragraphs will contain the same previous information but rephrased and then some more information will be added. so after everything it will be like 600 word count instead of it just being 250 and it will still contain the all information that author whats to pass to readers

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Arkalphaze
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Thank you for reading up to chapter 92 and for sharing your thoughts! 😊 I'm glad to hear that you find the overall story promising. Your feedback on the character backgrounds and the repetition in paragraphs is very insightful. It's important to me that the story flows well and keeps readers engaged, so I'll definitely take your points into consideration. I'm working on refining the narrative and ensuring that each part of the story is as concise and impactful as possible. Your suggestions are invaluable, and I'm excited to improve the upcoming chapters with these in mind.

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Arkalphaze:Thank you for reading up to chapter 92 and for sharing your thoughts! 😊 I'm glad to hear that you find the overall story promising. Your feedback on the character backgrounds and the repetition in paragraphs is very insightful. It's important to me that the story flows well and keeps readers engaged, so I'll definitely take your points into consideration. I'm working on refining the narrative and ensuring that each part of the story is as concise and impactful as possible. Your suggestions are invaluable, and I'm excited to improve the upcoming chapters with these in mind.
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