It has potential. The starts reminds me a bit of Squid Game, the tv show. It has few chapters so I can't get in depth here, I'll be back later to read more. Points to improve: Grammar: I has some issues with the gramatical side and some verbing problems. Nothing that a good rewriting don't fix.
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