This is Harem, for those who expected this comment or clarification hahahah. The story is not bad, but it does not focus on bleach, it seems more like a multiversal journey, personally I think he left his world very quickly, there is no proper transition of the character, relationships do not develop properly until now (family or friends) , even though you have the opportunity. He doesn't care about his world, that shows, he let the canon events happen and he doesn't get involved at all (I don't know what the author thought but I think he doesn't take into account butterfly effects, or anything similar and if so, it doesn't show in the fic). Note: There are quite a few unedited data dumps.
AllBullshit
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ถูกใจPersonally, I have never given 5 stars to any story apart from Lord of mysteries and My house of horror and maybe Trash of count family, and on this site the most I have given is 3 stars. So don't feel so offended. As for your fic, you have to admit that everything happens too fast, there is no character development and what is important, world development or world building. Yes, many powers but that's all? What can we expect as readers if everything moves so fast.
AllBullshit:So from what I see you are the guy that gives one star to all stories with Harem? I very much want to delete this but since I admit that your comment do have some bits of constructive criticism, I will let it here
AllBullshit:So from what I see you are the guy that gives one star to all stories with Harem? I very much want to delete this but since I admit that your comment do have some bits of constructive criticism, I will let it here
Yes, I did! Have you seen A Nascent Kaleidoscope? Also, the problem is that usually, the author tries to force love between the two sides, and most of the time it results in a rushed job. What I will try to do is very different.
Injustice:In his defense, have you ever seen a good harem fanfic? The correct answer is no
Injustice:In his defense, have you ever seen a good harem fanfic? The correct answer is no