Review Detail of Itsurbff_who_reads in The Tale Of The Worst One

The storyline seems good, as does the plot. The world building is unique but I have seen this concept a few times. There has been slight development in the story which is good. Character design is great, the basic character personality is displayed. Overall this story is good. Though the first chapter is bland and the grammar and punctuation need fixing. Also maybe try giving your character a realistic personality rather than a happy or determined one, that has been seen in protagonists a lot. Good book though.