I did not like it, I was hoping to read what a monster would be, I was hoping to read alucard and end up reading kittens, I will not say that it is interesting because for me it is not, I do not like when the mc find a partner too fast, much less someone being mentally unstable, it also doesn't indicate to me that you're practically giving him some of the more optional powers at his fingertips right from the start. It is something that ruins the plot and will drag the story to the point where you will not know what to do because nothing is a challenge for the mc anymore, this happens with most of the DXD fanfictions and it is frustrating, more I know that not everyone can write something like "a minor tale", well, good luck with your story
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wow, first of all thank you for an honest to goodness negative review. one that doesn't say, bad bad bad and gives one star. Thanks for that. I can see why this story wouldn't be to your taste if what you wrote in the review is what you're actually looking for. This made me to rewrite the fic descriptions and add the things that you suggested. It's more of a fic where the MC will be, as Superman writers put it 'as strong as he needs to be'. the only thing I didn't quite get from your review is the part about mental instability, who are you talking about? If it's about the MC, he's behaving how he wants according to the situation, it's like a madk that we all wear depending on social circumstances.
I'm talking about valeri, she is mentally unstable and becomes the partner of the Mc, aside from the fact that she is Op, she seems like a wild card to me, if she were the reincarnated boy, she would also look for that wild card. It's just that I feel like it takes all the suspense out of the story. I would recommend that he not move so fast, make him do interesting things, not be the typical fanfiction MC, self-righteous and merciful. It may be wish fulfillment, but let's be real who doesn't want their story to be remembered as one of the best, develop your character, don't be generic, make it unique. Trying to do things fast does not compromise the story, the best stories are slow paced, because both the author has time to develop his character, and the reader to get to know him. Anyway, thanks for taking the criticism well, I've had bad experiences with this, specifically with the creator of the Senju clan's last hope, good luck with the story, I hope it works for you💘.
Khalderas:wow, first of all thank you for an honest to goodness negative review. one that doesn't say, bad bad bad and gives one star. Thanks for that. I can see why this story wouldn't be to your taste if what you wrote in the review is what you're actually looking for. This made me to rewrite the fic descriptions and add the things that you suggested. It's more of a fic where the MC will be, as Superman writers put it 'as strong as he needs to be'. the only thing I didn't quite get from your review is the part about mental instability, who are you talking about? If it's about the MC, he's behaving how he wants according to the situation, it's like a madk that we all wear depending on social circumstances.image
