Allen_Walker1

It's not Madara, it's random, stop making false titles, simply to promote your stories, I think it's falling low, the fun thing about Madara is his personality, without that he isn't Madara

I'm talking about valeri, she is mentally unstable and becomes the partner of the Mc, aside from the fact that she is Op, she seems like a wild card to me, if she were the reincarnated boy, she would also look for that wild card. It's just that I feel like it takes all the suspense out of the story. I would recommend that he not move so fast, make him do interesting things, not be the typical fanfiction MC, self-righteous and merciful. It may be wish fulfillment, but let's be real who doesn't want their story to be remembered as one of the best, develop your character, don't be generic, make it unique. Trying to do things fast does not compromise the story, the best stories are slow paced, because both the author has time to develop his character, and the reader to get to know him. Anyway, thanks for taking the criticism well, I've had bad experiences with this, specifically with the creator of the Senju clan's last hope, good luck with the story, I hope it works for you💘.

I did not like it, I was hoping to read what a monster would be, I was hoping to read alucard and end up reading kittens, I will not say that it is interesting because for me it is not, I do not like when the mc find a partner too fast, much less someone being mentally unstable, it also doesn't indicate to me that you're practically giving him some of the more optional powers at his fingertips right from the start. It is something that ruins the plot and will drag the story to the point where you will not know what to do because nothing is a challenge for the mc anymore, this happens with most of the DXD fanfictions and it is frustrating, more I know that not everyone can write something like "a minor tale", well, good luck with your story

Systems ruin a good xian xia novel, how can you go against the heavens if your soul is tied to a crutch? And not to mention those that have a store, an aberration to logic, few authors bother to explain how it works well, I love LN fanfiction, but I think that in webnovel the systems with a store are everywhere, nel The only system that I see acceptable here is that of The gamer. Anyway, a little vent, although I don't like it, luck with the story work, work hard and give a lot to the pencil maybe you can be the next Tolkien Pddt: Sorry for My English

all in one day? lol, make it more realistic, but it's passable, this mc works faster than 300 people

Pdtt: Sorry for My English

You had a great idea, interesting and with a lot of potential, however what makes me leave it is the way to include the characters, the Reynare characters is an example, first with the gear, it still seemed acceptable there, then we have the revelation of that she is the granddaughter of the angel of death, that took me out of the story, apart from her attitude, it seems to me that she does not react as expected of someone who is hardly an orphan and not to mention the affection towards Mc, but anyway, I think that you could do a better job with an OC and introduce him to another situation, maybe a rescue of a villain or find her right after the tragedy of her parents, it would put a value on the affection for the MC and also add a touch of drama to the story, I loved the first chapters, however I leave it for this, I hope the criticism will serve you, otherwise just take it as I rambled, good luck with the story

Es bueno, pero las actualizaciones son un poco escasas, realmente disfrute la lectura, suerte .,....................................................................................

Yes, but this is exaggerated, in Emperor Domination, the protagonist acts with relative coherence and the characters are the typical ones who despise the less powerful, here most are lambe boots and it does not make sense as he thinks, it is not the worst I have read, but it gets closer

awardweeb? Link pls