Ideii

After reading 5 chapters: Okay, so I like the fact that it doesn't feel like your generic isekai story, but actually has some uniqueness to it. Just be VERY careful when writing. The idea/premise of the book is great and interesting but I believe it will be very hard to write characters that are supposed to be bad without making them actually bad/uninteresting. Remember to stick to your promises. I love your descriptions, they are fresh and different but still get the point across. A lot of info dumping in first few chapters. I know I might make similar mistakes, but try to introduce drama to avoid it. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5KtggfHY7qo https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-6HOdHEeosc&t=1s Brandon here has been a lot of help for me. He has a FREE 13 lecture uni class on writing and I just love it.

This is good. It shows the sidecharacter's motivations, introduces drama and informs the reader about Madam Genieves personality. All through dialogue between characters.

This description feels like an info dump. That way it also won't remain in the readers mind as good as one might hope. Try to introduce drama. Show, don't tell.

Control: Mission accomplished. She has frozen to death.

Thanks! I'll try to focus on those points.

Oh that makes sense. If I ever plan to add some romance, I'll consult your book.

*Good synopsis, makes me want to know more. *in the 1st chpt you write either Emperor Cai Huateng or he. With a long name be wary of repetition since it starts to get boring fast. i.e just "Emperor" or "Cai" would be good sometimes or some descriptive adjective. Same with other character names. *The way you start and end chapters makes it hard to stop reading. Good job! *I like the way the character's dialogue is written. The way they converse is engaging. All in all seems pretty good even though this type of sad romance isn't my cup of tea.

This means: A dead younger brother. I'm a bit ashamed for how long it took for me to realise you meant the deceased's

This feels a bit weird. I mean, he judging by the previous chpt he loved his wife a lot. Then he just re-marries in a couple of months?

Wow that's philosophical