Brazillian with english as a second language, amateur writer
Writing
of reading
52
Read books
I'll say that some solid yuri you got going on, I'm actually interested to see where this goes, shame that it has just started, I kind of wanted to binge it.
Yeah, about that, y'see, because of personal life matters, I've been releasing the recent chapters once every two weeks, when I sort it out they will be released weekly.
I do like that you have character portraits for the main cast, it actually helps a lot in visualizing them, but having a more detailed explanation of what the characters are thinking and feeling would help a lot to visualize what's going on around them, I hope to see this reaching it's potential.
Okay, okay, the way that you write is actually kind of sick, the exposition may be a bit too much, but that's my only gripe, this premise is so good, hope that it actually reaches its potential.
Thanks, I was writing it while thinking about what it would look like in a visual media like manga/manhwa since the story takes place in an anime style world
I'm conflicted, on one hand It shows that you're really trying with the story and it does have potencial, but on the other hand there are some questionable writing decisions like "Name: What they are saying." I don't know if I could vibe with that, also, It may just be me, but you might be going a little bit too fast with the pacing, again, it might just be me.
An mystery story with three main leads that actually ends up being well-written ? Wow, ok, now that's talent, can't wait to see the potential twists and turns in the future chapters !
Good dialogue and sci-fi ? Sign me the fuck up, always a sucker for an futuristic setting in stories, shame that it's so short right now, can't wait for it to reach it's potencial.
Pretty good, not a lot for me to chew on considering that it's only one chapter, but hey, I can still tell that there's potential. Hope to see more.
Ok, I'll admit, the cover of your novel almost turned off my interest in reading it. But when I actually did I'll say that I was pleasantly surprised by what I read, shame it's still the beginning of the story, but I'll keep my eye open.