I've always had stories in my head from when i was a little kid. from knights and wizards to super soldiers and space. im so excited to share them with you!
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Im sorry you feel that way. i hope you can find a novel that you are satisfied with!
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i have been thinking of adding more loyalist Astartes, but im not sure if its a good idea. ill do a poll and see what everyone thinks because i can go either way
sorry, i didn't see this till now! i completely understand. I wouldn't call it racist, but Xenophobic. in the Warhammer universe, humanity it on the brink of destruction because every alien species they come across is trying to kill them. there's a lot more to it than that, but i won't bore you with all that info. obviously, in the SW universe, not every alien species is hostile, so it will be interesting to see how the Astartes interact with them!
also, my main thing about the word count is that it's hard to want to get back into the story, knowing that im gunna have to skip most of the chapter to get to the good bits.
Overall, it's a good fic. i have a few problems with it, however. 1- Very clearly using ChatGTP to increase word count, which is really frustrating. i just feel like it's an info dump of fluff on every single chapter. 2- I have no idea what's going on in the story. there is no overarching story that's being played out (that i can tell). every single chapter is something completely new, meaning in one chapter he could be in the Warp, and the next he's finding another one of his Primarch brothers with the Emperor. My constructive criticisms would be this. stop using ChatGPT to increase the word count (3000 word chapters would give just as much info as 6000 or more chapters) and start having the story flow in one direction. It's really scattered right now, and it's frustrating to have to skip all the fluff.
It does switch around between the three, but only if they aren't together. otherwise, Maximus is the "main" character. i do give other POVs from time to time, like from Padme, Satine, and Palpatine, to kinda do world building, but never more than half a chapter or so, i think.
ok, yeah, i already have plans for them😈😈😈
are you talking about the night sisters?
It's more of a detail i chose to ignore because im pushing him more into the tech marine roll instead of apothecary