lordgsh

as i've said in my info part, I genuinely felt lacking... in regards to the parts you pointed out; such as the important dialogue, explanation of some things and historical backgrounds, most of it was omittance by purpose(probably due to my own terrible job of explaining things, or just that; I am clueless). In my mind(really just in my mind), it is better to let the story flow, but when I reread it again after all these time(I wrote and never read the things I wrote, until at a point where I completely forgot my storyline, then I will read it... bias and ego are a terrible thing) it doesn't make sense to me. Nowadays, I try to reeducate myself on the history behind what I wrote but unfortunately, around the time of the novel, it was practically non-existent other than some wikipedia pages mentioning it. sources regarding the Palaiologans were mostly minute, overshadowed by their subsequent fall under the Ottomans. Like you said, this is akin to a Children's story, which I agree, little to nothing is ever explained properly without doing some research to validate each and every pieces of information written. Thanks for the review, much appreciated! These kind of criticism is what I needed the most right now,; especially now that I am returning to pick up where I left off.

i can provide it, sure.

thanks for the feedback, probably one i needed. i'm in the process of editing all of the chapters from the beginning...

sure, my discord id is lordgsh

I guess i should start developing that arc before continuing the renaissance but since presently I wanted to add another action first before exploring the invention and renaissance. Would need to prepare the empire for that before entering the new age.

i guess so, probably with consumption also...

Indeed, since it was an earlier chapters, I had to have at least some assistance to help me find ideas. These repetitions were the result of it. Earlier on, I have abundance of ideas but as time goes on, it becomes much harder as I have to focus on the plot. while i did use ai, it was more to proofread my narrative rather than to use it to generate ideas, the ideas itself were purely mine, the wording however is not, i sometimes lost myself in my writing that I have forgotten some phrases or words that fits... It was inevitable since English is not my first language anyway...the idea is still there, but the delivery, doesn't quite sit... Although I used ai, it is not as if i took it word by word, i also had to rewrite and add it myself if i find the delivery doesn't fit what i had in mind... and since some of my chapters might sound offensive, using ai is not practical so i have to take time to better my delivery in the case ai cannot work as my editor. However, sometimes, i also took time to edit earlier chapters so that it doesn't seem as though as if it was ideas made from ai and not mine. I use ai purely for grammar checking and fix the phrase i forgot.

I imagined it to be like this at the moment

getting there, but not yet... it would be in future volume, but not so early...giving grenades is already overwhelming, much less muskets which can easily overwhelm the present arc if written recklessly... i want to follow the order of advancement as closely to historical one as possible retaining some semblance or realism in the process.

the sack of venice....like the sound of that