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Tsukasa_

Tsukasa_

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Expect slow updates from me. I value the content quality more.

2021-04-01 เข้าร่วมแล้วGlobal
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การเขียน

1.3h

ของการอ่าน

150

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ป้าย

5

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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    ตอบกลับถึง AethericKat

    Perhaps it was. I am still not a very good writer, you see. But still, I’ll take this comment into consideration. Thanks very much[img=recommend]

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    The Imperfections of Prodigies (REWRITING IN PROGRESS)
    ตะวันออก · Tsukasa_
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    Decent writing and story concept. Though I would've preferred it to be a tad more descriptive. Overall, it's good. I don't notice any grammatical errors. And the story's pretty good.

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    Demonic Host Against The Bloodline
    แฟนตาซี · BrewingFantasies
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    I'll be giving this a review tomorrow :P

    Ch 1 Young Master Rivers
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    Demonic Host Against The Bloodline
    แฟนตาซี · BrewingFantasies
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    Ooh, nice

    Ch 1 The Vampire Intruder
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    Demonic Host Against The Bloodline
    แฟนตาซี · BrewingFantasies
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    Well, the story's quite interesting. Perhaps a bit too fast-paced but it's all good. Dialogues, though; unrealistic, too detailed, and unnatural. Dialogues can interrupt the story's flow. I suggest you improve in that field.

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    Omnipotence X Omniscience X Omnipresence
    แฟนตาซี · ShadowKatake
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    Unless it's intentional, you're making your main lead sound a tad narcissistic.

    It's what now? Creator? I'm just a prodigious novelist.
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    Omnipotence X Omniscience X Omnipresence
    แฟนตาซี · ShadowKatake
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    Here's a tip on writing, don't be too detailed ._. For instance, your character had just eaten. He said, "Ah, finally. That was some great, juicy meat!" It's low-key creepy and unrealistic, y'know? Don't just straight up say "Ten instant noodles". Instead write, "Maybe I ate too much instant noodles..." or the such.

    "Finally! I had been typing and writing nonstop! I had even consumed 10 instant noodles."
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    Omnipotence X Omniscience X Omnipresence
    แฟนตาซี · ShadowKatake
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    The story's good and all but I sometimes have a hard time envisioning the scenes. One of the main points of writing is imagery. If anything, it's the author's only problem. At some point in the story, I realized you can't handle making your readers feel the tension of a certain scene. I suggest being more descriptive, not too much as that'll be a bit creepy considering this is a first-person point of view.

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    Soul for a Girlfriend?
    สมจริง · lon_okami
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    Indeed

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    Soul for a Girlfriend?
    สมจริง · lon_okami
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    The story's pretty interesting. The plot is graspable. But the writing could be better. I noticed a few grammatical mistakes that can be easily be fixed by sheer editing. This novel indeed has potential. I shall await your improvement.

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    Ms Universe System
    ไซไฟ · LeftPinky
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    Very good grammar and plot. 10/10 would recommend. Characters also top tier.

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    Alpha Princess's Possessive Mate
    แฟนตาซี · Eaagles_wings
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    ตอบกลับถึง GoWrite2

    Eh? The words I use here are what I use every day though.

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    The Imperfections of Prodigies (REWRITING IN PROGRESS)
    ตะวันออก · Tsukasa_
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

    Ch 1 I'm not a Hero, But a Support
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    The Ultimate Support Character
    แฟนตาซี · Dyrem
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

    Ch 1 I'm not a Hero, But a Support
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    The Ultimate Support Character
    แฟนตาซี · Dyrem
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    ตอบกลับถึง D0NA

    If you won't tell me I'll block the said person in discord, leave his server, and never return to the fanfic server.

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    The Imperfections of Prodigies (REWRITING IN PROGRESS)
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    ตอบกลับถึง D0NA

    Can you tell me you're not who I think you are?

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    The Imperfections of Prodigies (REWRITING IN PROGRESS)
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    The author has an amazing way of words. Though, he could work on his capitalization and grammar. The characters are good and the plot itself is-- just-- interesting.

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    Deleted foreverrr
    แฟนตาซี · Transcended_being
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    One word-- impeccable. Great grammar. Characters? Well, the chemistry between them is amazing. The story, though? Well, can't rate that now, can I? After all, there's still one chapter at the moment. But oh well, looking forward to future updates

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    Encounter: The Healer
    แฟนตาซี · J_Davids
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    An interesting beginning that hooked me right in. The characters are relatable. Love them. The story's plot is unique; never read anything like it. I hope to see more of these. Looking forward to your next chapter <3

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    Nothing
    แฟนตาซี · Deleted0000
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  • Tsukasa_
    Tsukasa_2yr
    แปะแล้ว

    It's my first time reading a romance novel here on WebNovels. In my own personal opinion, this is probably one of best ones I've read on the site(not that I've read much xD). The characters, though; the characters' personality are so natural. The storyline's interesting and refreshing to read. Honestly, it's just so good

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    Fated For A Demon
    แฟนตาซี · Jannah1559
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