Froschmann
Lv3
The Frogman provides... sometimes
2021-01-27 เข้าร่วมแล้วAntarctica
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Froschmann7hเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"I actually had a face-off with this Chicken Demon! If I hadn't been agile enough to dodge from side to side, I would have been attacked by it numerous times!"- Froschmann8hเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วOriginally it didn't know who it was following and was about to run past the door when it was successfully attracted by the scream. It paused and turned its head to look inside the shop.
- Froschmann8hเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วIn front of the chicken shop counter, a woman with a beautiful face and a seductive figure was lazily lounging on the counter.
- Froschmann1dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วOnce more, the hilichurl was a single step from meeting the creator. All nerves on his brain told Sai to finish it, but his muscles wouldn't budge. He just wasn't ready to kill another being yet.
- Froschmann2dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
She's like 9 or something bro, kids don't think about that stuff. This is just weird
He walked out of the auditorium with a hot steam flowing from his body, his smooth skin and well toned muscles were a captivating sight, Tinker had a little blush on her face. - Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"Kill!" With a war cry they launched themselves into battle. Han Yan summoned the Kraken beast soul and rode it towards the crab. It effortlessly swam in a curve, the sea it's natural habitat.
- Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
What's up with that by the way? The "Kill!" trope in novels is so weird I swear
"Kill!" With a war cry they launched themselves into battle. Han Yan summoned the Kraken beast soul and rode it towards the crab. It effortlessly swam in a curve, the sea it's natural habitat. - Froschmann3dตอบกลับถึง DaoistuMpk8F
What country are you from? Your choice of words and Grammar is quite interesting lol
With a nod, Han Yan flew away as instructed, leaving Bian alone on the mountain's peak. With a sense of determination and anticipation, he summoned his super crystal armor and super dragonfly wings, taking off in the direction of Ning Yue. - Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
That song sucks
After some days of rehearsal they nailed the song perfectly. Bian was impressed and satisfied with their learning speed and adaptability. They released their first song titled 'need to know.' - Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"Then what's left to consider, date him, marry him have two kids, adopt a puppy buy a yacht." Lin Miru liked to live on the simple side of life.
- Froschmann3dตอบกลับถึง Shisui34Bian Manwei "I used the pen you gave me to write down the translation"
- Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"Jing Jia got 998 because that's all he could get, Bian Manwei got 1000 because that was all there was to get."
- Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"Impossible" he spat the coffee out of his mouth. He checked the translated version and was astonished, it usually took weeks and even months before a scroll like this one could get translated.
- Froschmann3dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วHe would leap and maneuver over some branches and he climbed higher and higher up the tree. 'Return to monkey' he thought as he made his way up. Nearly thirty minutes later he had arrived at the top of the tree.
- Froschmann4dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วAnxiously, Sakayanagi Arisu tapped her cane... in frustration.
- Froschmann4dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วJerry J. Anderson...
- Froschmann5dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
No, it was way too forced. Maybe the method wasn't, but your writing made it so. Just spend a bit more time at a crucial point like this. Some parts are more important than others, especially if you planned it for such a long time. This just seemed like a rushed and forced job, and you probably lost a lot of people/readers due to it.
But I don't think it was forced though. Each scene was reasonable. Malekith and Kurse getting freed from mind stone's effect because of the fall on the ground. Even him getting stabbed from behind when he was exhausted from stopping the ship. - Froschmann5dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว"Oh, Oh, she disappeared! She disappeared!" Pietro shouted excitedly as he watched Jane slip and disappear from the world.
- Froschmann5dเพิ่มความเห็นแล้วAfter that Jerry went to his lab to to study more ways to make his new body stronger. Just yesterday, he had enhanced the healing factor's efficiency by 0.27%. It was a huge success.