Its an interesting read, there's a few things you should fix being grammatical errors and maybe pacing. but other than that's its good.

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Absolutely amazing, I cannot wait for more!

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I am currently at chapter 625, and I have to say this is one of the best if not the best novel I have read on here. The writing is spectacular, the characters are relatable and the action is awesome as hell. Thank you so much for writing this and I cannot wait for more chapters I am 100% hooked on this novel.

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