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stamina and power?
Ummm... what? bro what are you on about?
nvm. i was still thinking of one piece. but still. under an hour for a full chapter, that is some crazy work
my guy, that is 50 pages in a single hour. that shit is crazy.
Oh THANK GOD. Thank you. For using Amplification instead of the Counter. Ugh, I hate that thing. Anyway.
[Blaze] |Rare Ability| Allows you to produce and control flames, allowing you to unleash streams of fire, fire arrows, fire whips, walls of fire etc.
[Restraints and Amplifications] |Rare Ability| Novel's Extra - Allows you to put restraints on yourself to amplify your powers, you can sacrifice your sight to boost your hearing to daredevil levels, you can sacrifice an arm to make another arm much stronger. You can restrict other ability slots to make the others stronger. The amplifications are equal to the severity of the restraints you place on yourself.
[Fishman] |Rare Ability| One Piece - Allows you to transform into a fishman, as a fishman you have enhanced strength and water affinity as well as water-breathing.
The omniscient third person perspective is not done well at all. This sort of perspective is the hardest to do, and I don't believe it is working here. I would recommend either sticking with one perspective or looking for ways to clear up the confusion caused by this omniscient third person perspective writing. Otherwise, great chapter.