Don't use sound effects, just tell us the sound that happens and we can imagine it much better than you could explain it to us in written form.

The best balance between musculature, muscle definition, flexibility, and aesthetics. Much like a sprint runner's physique.

Its good. Its kind of slow, but good. I like it.

Essence of Blank

Absolute Erasure

Existence Manipulation

No.

No, this does not happen like this and that is not our thought process. If you wear dirty or worn out clothes, then you can expect to be judged as poor or some variation of that. Celebrities are certainly not like that either. Well, not all of them are like that. Just like not all people are good people. This level of racism and clasism is not so open, thought about, or even processed like that. What you WOULD find, is the classic making fun of an asian person's language, how they look, maybe assume they are a poorer class for the more racists bunch. But this level of racism is not mainstream or widespread. It is dramatized for the novel.

Diviiiiiiine Simp!

Waste chapter and annoying. Just get to the good stuff already. Filler

Awesome story, however, thats not how it works... for Superman. Magic affects him as does any other normal mortal person. Meaning that Superman or even Kryptonians don't have any special weakness to magic that causes them to be more vulnerable to magic. It just affects them the same as any normal person. So, the strength this little girl has should not have any effect on Tut's skin, as his skin is near invulerable and the little girl only has 'little girl' strength. Now, if the hands and attacks of the little girl were somehow the enhanced with magic, then yeah awesome. Just a little pet peeve. Anyway, awesome story.

run-on sentence.

Maybe? Perhaps. But they would have to whole-heartedly believe that they are almighty. That's kind of hard to do when your own FATHER is the almighty. But then again it could just be one of those things where maybe they're not that powerful to achieve almighty status. So, I don't know. Maybe? Perhaps? Possibly?

carpet in a classroom? as the floor? heh

Because Iphone apparantly has to official way to save the clipboard. But android is just holding as if to paste and justing clicking clipboard from the options that appear.

Oh the phone. Android or Iphone?

Cutting is taking the characters from the current place and keeping it in the clipboard. Its probably still in your clipboard: To get to your clipboard history at any time, press Windows logo key + V. From the clipboard history, you can paste and pin frequently used items by choosing an individual item from your clipboard menu. Pinning an item keeps it from being removed from the clipboard history to make room for new items.

that isn't a spell. It's literally nature trying to correct for Amara's true immortality.

So you should've done it in much better way than this. Like seriously, "MC needs to tell these two because he has done something they can't explain and they believe MC is the devil or something and MC wants to clear that misunderstanding with just this." I don't know, to me, that just seems kind of forced. I can't think of a better way to write this necessity, at first I was like, "just make the duo already suspect MC is Adam", but then I was like, "Mc is like a ten thousand years old and he knows better than to give away himself to a bunch of literal children compared to him." And so I am stuck as to what advice I should give, I just feel like the situation felt kind of forced.

You messed up that continuity real hard there. There were so many ways that you could have done this. Like, instead of just making Tut fly up by himself-which he wasn't doing last chapter-just make it so that he has to save them while also keeping Sara safe. More tension for the story. A story's lifeblood is the tension that arrives from conflict and it conflict itself. There is so little tension and the possibility for it in this novel already with the main character basically being Superman-level strong at 14, that you need to find the best ways to squeeze tension and conflict from other sources. Keeping Sara safe while also saving the F4 was a good place to insert tension and conflict. However, you decided to completely forget that Tut was bringing Sara into space in the last chapter and just retconned it to "somehow" make sense. Your story needs to have good internal consistency otherwise how will people trust you to tell a good story?