ELKO

Wow, I've been here for 5 years...

Dude, you post an insulting picture to me and then complain that I insulted you? Really??? I don't know if this is a cultural difference, I'm so confused.

I'm a fan of good reading, I can tolerate when a character is OCC as long as it's well done. But it seems like your Neanderthal brain is content with little.

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Yeeeey!

I've read so many mha fanfics that I've already memorized what happens next, I like it when they add stories outside of the academy or change certain things from canon, it makes it more original. Thanks for the chapter.

Okay, I read about 10 chapters, and that's really bad and I'll tell you why. The writing lacks emotion, Izuku is constantly defeated in this story and my reaction is: ok, when will the cool part come? Everything is a bit robotic, the monologues and internal dialogues are boring and superficial. The writing is bad, with a lack of punctuation and no "" in the dialogue, I can only guess what a line is or isn't and who it belongs to. There are a lot of flashabcaks that don't interest me. The characters are evil for no apparent reason, like, All Might didn't have a quirk so he would never neglect someone without a quirk, I would even accept him being an absent father, you know? Inko too, in the beginning it was clear that she loved and cared for Izuku and then she just neglected him for no apparent reason? I know that a villain needs a tragic past but you need to know how to do that. Unless someone says that some kind of invisibility quirk was cast on Izuku, I wouldn't believe any kind of explanation. Anyway, I don't want to be an idiot, I'm just doing an honest review of what I found and raising points that can be improved in the future, I didn't get very far in this fanfic so I don't know if the writing has improved or anything, but if it has, the author should review the beginning of the story.

This doesn't make any sense, it doesn't match the characters' personalities, and even though it's different from the original, the story itself contradicts itself by showing that the twin brother and mother loved Izuku.

Whenever I see descriptions of Shoto using his flames, only one thing comes to mind: didn't the clothes burn? Is he fighting naked?

But Shoto has helped Bakugou twice before, so technically Bakugou is still in debt.