Why blood red eyes. Uchiha dont walk all day with their sharingan active. Also academy student probably wouldn’t know what a shadow clone was. This looks more than some Chinese xianxia young master fic every now and then

This novel is available on fanfiction. An other author wrote it and more chapter are available don’t pay for the patr you know what And shame on you for stealing someone else work and pretending to be th eauthor while profiting from it.

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How is garp the hero of anything as he hasnt caught the pirate King yet

Dialogues seems so artificial and wrong… no one speak like that

No problem, happy to help even in a veeeeeeeery small way ^^ good chapter and thanks for the read.

You can’t use a tourniquet on your abdomen… tourniquet is used to stop blood flow. We use it on limbs… and even putting it on shoulder is impossible. If he somehow managed to put a working tourniquet on his abdomen, That would mean all of his higher or lower part don’t have blood anymore…

No she is not they are so far in this story a marchant family, not pirate and small time criminal at best…

You know there pistol aren’t revolver or semi auto… they are the old model that need black powder and shoot round bullet. So they have 1 or 2 shot at best…

Honestly it’s bad… 1 st chapter isnt even a chapter it’s not even an overview of the 1st game. It’s worse, way WORSE. In a few sentence the author just say we beat saren e , sidestepped the collector and I got a harem… like What THe actual’fuck? Where is the story? Character interraction? Developing trust? Changing some bit of the scenario in a meaningful way? Trash fic trash writing skill, don’t waste your time.

Which adult is going to try and beat up what they beleive to be a kid because they stared at them… is this how you write one of the good Marine officer ?

,??? Dragon died instantly… then 2 paragraph later, under the control of dragon… did chat gpt write this chapter?

What do you mean cannot fly? Isn’t there one of the 6th power that allow to jump on air? That plus being lightning he can litteraly fly faster than sound… lightning is probably probably se second fastest thing after light speed

A meal that is worth more than an entire day worth of dungeon hunting on the 9th floor? Makes absolutely no sense… 1 not everyone is or has the strength of an adventurer 2 Augustus is already OP what he achieve in 1 day may very well be 1 week or Ben 1 month for a normal adventurer and that is without taking the cost of equipment upkeep, injury treament or supporters… if a single meal would be more than 40 000 valid their economy would collapse as most everyone couldn’t afford to eat…

Good old Trojan horse… wait… yunkai dragon ?

I guess you would have happily collaborated in 39-45 then, good for you and your circus monkey. What a great human being you make

So because he is a kid tasked to save the world as a mature adult you will just do nothing and hope that everything goes for the best according to some cartoon you watched in another life and that he doesn’t get brutally murdered? You don’t even try to help ? Offer some word of advice ? Some training in bending fire? How very mature and adult of you truly… have your own little adventure and life in a world where a tyrant terrorize over 90% of the world and just say « fuck it ain’t my problem lololol I will just have geisha and casino instead while the rest of the world dies get enslaved or destroyed and I have the power to make thing better even if slightly but hell nah I won’t »

Funny you say that… you could read your message and apply it to yourself cause clearly tou haven’t read what I wrote…

Siiigh…. So after so many chapter he finally cross path with the avatar a proceed to… do nothing. Not even a conversation absolutely nothing… this story has gone more and more to the gutter. Nothing happens, he just wait for things to happen, is always passive dépité wielding more power and knowledge than anyone in this world bare the avatar. He is so passive Harry Potter could take a lesson from him. Where is the MAIN character and the story?