toothache jinx

As the hours passed, Mabus became engrossed in the comic, losing track of time. Suddenly, his stomach growled loudly, reminding him that it was already 2:02 AM and he was due for a midnight snack. He tossed the comic aside and headed to the kitchen, his hunger pangs leading the way.

he was now rummaging through the kitchen, searching for a snack to satisfy his late-night cravings. He stumbled upon a mysterious, ancient-looking candy wrapped in a dusty cloth. The label read "Galactic Gloop" and claimed to be a rare, out-of-this-world treat. Intrigued, Mabus unwrapped the candy and popped it into his mouth. As soon as the candy touched his tongue, he knew something was off. It tasted bitter and sour, like a mixture of rotten fruit and battery acid. But Mabus, being a curious and adventurous soul, decided to chew on it anyway. Big mistake.

The candy began to dissolve, releasing a strange, tingling sensation that spread through his mouth and into his teeth. Mabus's teeth screamed in agony as the candy's bitter and sour flavors assaulted his taste buds. The tingling sensation spread like a wildfire, igniting a burning pain that felt like a thousand tiny needles stabbing at his teeth and gums. The ache was so intense it made his eyes water, and he could feel his heart racing in his chest. He spat out the candy, but the pain only grew worse, like a relentless drumbeat pounding in his mouth. Mabus clutched his jaw, feeling like his teeth were being wrenched apart by an invisible force. The pain was so excruciating it made him want to scream, and he couldn't help but wonder if he'd made a terrible mistake by eating the mysterious candy.

Just then, Lusinta appeared in the kitchen, a wicked grin spreading across her face. "It's jinx, my jinx is working, hahaha!" she exclaimed, tears of laughter streaming down her face. "I told you not to eat that candy, Mabus! Now you're paying the price!"

"Ah, no! What have I done?" Mabus cried out, clutching his mouth in agony. "I think I've got a toothache... or maybe even a curse!" And so, Mabus's toothache torment began, a relentless and merciless pain that seemed to have a life of its own. It pulsed and throbbed, making his mouth feel like a war zone, and Mabus was left to wonder if he'd ever find relief from the agony that had taken over his mouth.

"it's his FUCkEN jinx, now his jinx too can be now caused by people too"

thinking of it his thoughts now trailed back to the system

"nah Even if it's it I will never surrender"

shrugging with tears he went to his room to tell his daddy

You're right, "waaaaaah" might not be the most realistic way to portray a 17-year-old's cry. Here's a revised version with more realistic dialogue and actions:

Mabus stormed into his father's room, his face contorted in agony. "Dad, my teeth hurt so much! Lusinta gave me a toothache!"

His father looked up from his book, a patient expression on his face. "Mabus, I told you to ignore her. She's just trying to get a rise out of you."

Mabus clenched his fists, his eyes welling up with tears. "But Dad, it hurts so much! I can't take it anymore!"

His father's voice was calm. "Mabus, it's almost over. She's leaving soon and you won't have to deal with her anymore."

Mabus's face twisted in frustration. "I don't care about that! I just want the pain to go away! Make it stop, Dad!"

His father sighed. "Mabus, you need to be strong. It's just a little pain."

Mabus's eyes flashed with anger. "A little pain?! You try living with this agony for a day!"

His father's expression turned firm. "Mabus, that's enough. You're acting like a child. Go lie down and try to relax."

Mabus's face crumpled, and he burst into tears. "I can't relax! I'm in too much pain!"

His father's voice was firm. "Mabus, go to your room and calm down. This will all be over soon."

Mabus's tears turned to angry sobs. "I don't want to calm down! I want the pain to go away now!"

His father stood up, his expression stern. "Mabus, go to your room now. That's enough."

Mabus's face contorted in pain and anger, he stomped out of the room, slamming the door behind him.

His father sighed and shook his head.

Mabus slammed the door to his room shut and collapsed onto his bed, still sobbing.

He buried his face in his pillow, trying to muffle his cries.

His father came into the room, trying to calm him down.

Mabus pushed him away, still sobbing. "Leave me alone! I hate Lusinta!"

His father tried again. "Mabus, please calm down. It's almost over."

Mabus's sobs turned to anguished cries. "I don't want to calm down! I want the pain to go away!"

His father's expression turned sad. "Mabus, I know it hurts. But you have to be strong."

Mabus's face contorted in pain, he screamed. "I am being strong! I'm trying to survive this agony!"

His father tried to hold him, but Mabus pushed him away again.

Mabus's father sighed and left the room, closing the door behind him.

Mabus was left alone, still sobbing and clutching his mouth in agony.

He curled up into a ball, his body shaking with sobs.

Tears streamed down his face as he lay there, feeling miserable.

He finally fell into a fitful sleep, his pain and anger still simmering.

His father checked on him later, seeing him asleep, his face still contorted in pain. ..