question

I was reading some novels here and I realized that they were written in a different way from mine so I would like to ask you guys prefer as in this novel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16958099705910505/45523831628027159/Return-of-the-last-survivor/Alive%3F

what I'm asking is which one is more fluid to read, which is more immersive, please answer, I want to take advantage of that there are still few chapters to rewrite if you prefer this format

I will not change the story, I will only change the format in which it was written so that you can get better involved with the story