I Transmigration to High School DXD (Re-Writing)

one of the best fanfics , well author heed my advice add a proper synopsis add satarous pic as pp of the story your eenglish s good enough so don't mention that it isn't your first language etc. as it drives away the viewers like i had saved you story for a while just checked it today so some changes and ot will be a banger

While the start of the story seemed good with his wishes, the other chapters just seem to be extremely forced and have barely any development. the grammar isn't good but that's understandable. I'd recommend that you don't just throw in a bunch of girls then say they are a part of you're harem. you have to understand the character that you want to add, cause ophis wouldn't just join a harem it's not how she is as a character. you don't have to listen to what I say just some advice. I hope you're story goes well, I just can't read something that has a pocket harem.

Wow, MC is being portrayed as a generic and amoral character right from the first chapter, and the gamer system isn't helping to improve the story either. The four-wish twist was the final nail in the coffin, and I hate to give such a low score, but this story has no redeeming qualities. The grammar is poor as well.

Writer warned us of the level of grammar which can be mostly overlooked but some of it will confuse you, being unable to decipher the meaning behind what is being said. Adds a lot of characters from fanfics with no true background to them. seems unnecessary when you already have a plethora of women from Canon stories to choose from. In 8 chapters the MC has bumped into 3 women. which I find really stupid. there are a million ways to start a convo with a girl. Other than that, the story seems fun and the powers can be used in new and refreshing ways if done right. The story might want to slow down with the overwhelming amount of women being introduced way too quickly, doing so would help flesh out these new characters.

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Your fairy cover brought me some nostalgic memories. ..... . .... ... ...........m. ..... ... .m.......... . .....a.. hh....i....r

As the author of course I will rate my work 5 Stars as well to say 2 things: #1. English isn't even close to my primary language, so don't expect good grammar. #2. I just write in my spare time when I have nothing to do.