GOT/ASOIAF: Break the Wheel

what can I say the story is awesome and each individual character's has depth in it, the world building was so on point that you can feel the author passion resonate in each chapter it is a most read for serious Game of thrones fan

Very good story. Interesting development of the world. The pace of storytelling is like i prefer, whithout rushing and with enough details. Please, keep up the good work.

This is a really good AU of Martin's Planetos. It is well-written, the development is interesting, and the characters are like-able. The MC is a chill dude, which makes the story nice to read. He isn't some edgy murder hobo, thankfully, and the harem idea is well-executed - especially if one looks at it from the perspective of someone who has no idea of the morals of the late 19th century and onwards.

Thought I would warn everyone that the harem members get with each other. It’s just self-justified NTR for the cucks.

To be honest I was confused the whole time. I read around 10 chapters and watch the movies so I should know a lot but still got confused. Who's the MC because I don't know. Author shifts the perspective to much that you don't know who's who. It's basically a time chart with only important events for each year. I wanted to give a lower score but I couldn't because I didn't know how to score this. Also author when does the book start?

this story is very confusing, in my opinion writing this fanfic is very messy, you also write too much pov of each character without you focusing on mc

The name of the protagonist and the other characters is confusing, added to the poor quality of the writing, the story is too confusing, which gives headaches when trying to understand and order it. It may not be consistent with the social environment, but it would be preferable for the protagonist to be called Bob, Max, Alex, Carlos, Manuel, Miguel, Pepito... Also, the point of view (POV) changes in this story are another reason why it's confusing, they're poorly done. You could dedicate an entire chapter to the POV of the other characters, but don't combine 2 or more POV in a single chapter. Finally, it is not known exactly at what moment a character is speaking or thinking, nor at what moment the characters start or end the dialogue.

So confusing, you can write it off as normal, but again it's your choice. I didn't enjoy it even though I tried my best. You wanted to create something extraordinary but now it is totally a mess , I wish the writing style of this novel was normal. I'm giving it 2 stars because I feel like I wasted my time here

Why is this in the yuri tag section 🙂...

Yeah, pretending to be an author. Such a mess in just first few chapters, that you understand how much shame this novelists have nowadays. Lots of stupid woman running amok all over westeros, cause an idiot can't decide on his hormonal stupidness

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As expected, harem is really not my cup of tea. Also, what happened to sticking to their personalities? Lyanna and Ashara dayne? Fr? Still, good luck to your fanfic and I hope you'll write another one which is not a harem, or even romance.

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all the relationships between the characters seem strained and clumsy......................................................................................................................

for those who want to know: story development 2 the rest 4 the beginnin of the story is quite boring and there are many oc characters. after about 20 to 30 chapters the story gets better and is quite enjoyable. From chapter 130 onwards the story development is taking a turn for the worse. The mc overcomes his main antagonists off without a struggle. The blackfires were established as a bigger enemy with the backing of the golden company. They were brought down by some assasin and then they were just integrated with the mc. Viserys had the potential to be this character in the family of the mc, that would betray him and give the mc problems by being jealous, … But then he just said, that his canon behaviour was just an act and he is fully ok with being cucked by the mc. In the end the mc gets all the women, that the author wants him to have and the story is being developed in such a way, that the mc has no problems. Overall that makes the story boring in the later stages and unsatisfying

So far this is a great story can't wait to see where you take it and how it will play into the original lore of Game of Thrones anyway just writing to say that i have fallen in love with this story so far so just keep doing what you are doing cause its fantastic.

Tempted to read due to your other Novel that I love.

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