My review[Spoliers]

So the reason I am writing this like this is that for some reason Webnovel is just not letting me post my review. I don't know why but it shows for me but when I checked it with the alternate account which I made for this purpose as this also happened when I posted a review for my other Fanfic. and it just doesn't show at all. so here we are writing it down in the Auxiliary chapters.

The first topic is story progression. The story is like really slow-paced it is really slow as the main story has been barely explored making the chapters uneventful and boring for the reader to continue. it is slower than jack sparrow leaving the pub except the point is that he is dead drunk so he is not moving anytime soon.

Characters: well, I made my mistakes here even though I did a somewhat good job on Marin. it was a bad decision to make Grayfia less mature than her counterpart because of her young age but I am working on it so don't worry.

Now Scathach I know the way she is introduced is the worst way possible Way to OOC like we are talking Earth and moon type shit it was a totally different character and I had a reason for that but I failed to get it across and it made this mess. her character is revealed little u little in the later chapters as tried to get an image of her across properly.

Apophis is just introduced so I can't say much on her part I'll leave that to you guys as she is an OC so tell me what you feel about her.

Now We will talk about the protagonist first as we know he is quite dull or in more sophisticated words emotionless. the guy doesn't feel much other than a little after what he has been through. It is like he just trying to close his eyes to everything that happens but still somehow fails to do it for some reason. I mean that is how the novel will progress.

Ahem* that is how he is moving around even though he doesn't want anything to do with anyone. and please for the love of God he isn't Emo Ok the guy is just fed up let him be and if does look emo then it might be my fault as the author I failed to portray his character as I wanted it to be. As for the reason why I decided to write an MC like this.

SO, let me tell you about the original Idea for this, this was supposed to be a normal teenager getting reincarnated with no cheats. but here is what I think.

The easiest MC to write is the Perverted and Ruthless scheming ones. this is my opinion alright as I sometimes think of the same scenario but with a different type of MC. I waste most of my time like this bite me.

And an emotionless MCs are hard ones to write as normal scenarios and stereotypes won't work on them, I haven't seen one till now or that might be my uncultured ass which hasn't read enough but I just haven't seen an MC like this done correctly. everyone goes for the high IQ that knows how everyone acts out because he knows the plot while gathering women who can be useful or have a hidden talent that was ignored in the original because the Main MC was to busy getting over his emo tendencies or was just straight up dense.

Then there is a perverted MC that wants to fuck every female creature that moves while also knowing the plot or sometimes he doesn't. but he still wants to fuck every female creature that moves that stays the same. I have many of these ones and I don't want to write a character like this.

As some of you who read my other Book SLAW if you haven't, do check it out, that MC is also the stereotypical Mc that Plans because he knows the plot and has already made a harem but a plausible one at least I'd like to say that to myself.

So I wanted to try something new and I decided to make an emotionless MC. And as you can see I did an Absolutely Fucking Terrible job at it. what I think is that I failed to make the readers sympathize with the character and that is just my fault as I am not a good enough writer to convey it.

I had many ideas when I wrote the chapters like I felt many things about the words that the characters say in a way or at a certain time. But the readers didn't feel it like I did. and that is where my biggest flaw I failed to make my readers empathize with the characters so that they can be engrossed in the story enough to not care about the slow pace.

it is just a side thought but I have a habit of leaving small clues behind about the things that will happen in the future this is just what I like to do but the point is no one is reading with that point of view and they won't until the story is interesting enough for them to pay that much attention to it.

Like, let's take the introduction of Scathach. The illusion was god awful it only looked like her and wasn't anything like her. that is what we see. but that same thing is extremely different if you look at it from The MC's perspective who became angry over it. the same MC who was just chatting in his head while two characters who are 3 to 4 times stronger than him are trying to kill him while a character that is stronger than them is hiding near him.

The dudes just chilling there not bothered by it. but this same guy gets so angry over a third-rate illusion that he nearly damn kills himself it looks stupid and trust me it is. but it is different for him as it has more impact on him than what was shown. that how much he cares for her that the guy nearly threw his life away to kill the one who cast the illusion.

It spoke how much she meant to him and a complete character flip for him to get angry over something when he reacts in a very dull way to everything. I just failed at making the scenario properly which might be the reason for the mess. it just sounded really cool in my head until it came on paper.

still, I have no excuse for the 4 chapters long flashback. it just happened because I thought it was a good idea and the key word being 'thought' it was a shit idea. well whatever

Well, that is about it, I have never written a review like this before so I just made this on a whim. I know many people might've stopped reading in the middle and rightfully so as the mistakes I made were enough for them to stop reading.

People are only going to be disappointed in something when they have any expectations from said things.

Thank you for reading it. well, they aren't here anyway so no point in saying this...

So for those who are still stuck with me on this and still continue to read this, I really appreciate you.

Thank you