the seagull

The main character isn't to full of herself. She takes her time to when it comes to her revenge. Her mother is a crazy b*tch/stupid. Her old sister is like a seagull, saying mine, mine, and mine. The father is like a unbalanced scale tipping for side to side, weighting what's right and what's wrong.

#1 I would remove the scene thing st the begining of each chapter, as a third-party it interupts the flow and also we can inference scene changes. It is also not a good idea to make your first paragraph like a movie script while rest of chapter is not. You should replace this with descriptions and actions to get thst effect you desire from the script paragraph you keep using at he start. I would also try to add a little bit on the world info as it is very confusing to read, at first it was ok since I was inferencing which is good since its not direct but with all the scene changes this makes a bad as the world is confusing as a reader. Your writing quality although not the best was pretty good. All the scene chsnges though made it super wierd to read though. I think you should a chapter 0 with some info on the world (or some extra scenes with some info doesnt need to be everything but so we can understand the world before u transition everywhere like god, if u do this would do it after C2), or try to explain what you see / think in your head in your chapters, make sure not to info dump though as that will ruin everything and make readers potentislly skim or leave. I would try to make your scene transitions more fluid as it will be more interesting to resdad doesnt disrupt flow you built. Try to add a little more descreptions on your characters too, like (guessing goddess was person at the start) in c3 or c4 the water goddess randomly appeared and pitied the seagull? Im confused though ik thats the MC. Also for your synoposis I wouldnt put one gull as that sounds like a name and a really bad one at that.

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