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Is his name Alex or Ryan Quinn? Make up your mind. Also, having chapters dedicated to Peter's POV feels very unecessary and a waste of time. He is irrelevant to the plot.

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Story development or Plot(4.7⭐) : The story was definitely wholesome and interesting especially for the MC to interact to the characters show, and the author really did a good job for the transition of MC being on the story. Updating stability(4.9⭐): The update stability was good and I can see the author are learning and taking the readers suggestions in the chapters comment... Writing quality (3.9⭐): The writing kind of feel lazy at times (No offense author), How do I describe it? I mean, in some or most chapters, a whole chapter are just built upon a dialogue, similar to scripts, however, novel isn't a script. For example, [Character Name] and the character line next to it. Like this; Ryan - "Input sentence here". It's not really that bad in some cases, however for the people who didn't watch the show may or may not be able to get it and will get confused of some chapters. Like how Claire wants Luke to put something on, but since it's just a dialogue without a character expression, action or background (What's happening in the Background) description, some readers who didn't watch the show will get confused and wonder what's she wants for Luke to put on? And also by how Phil are secretly inappropriately touching Gloria when he was stopping her fight against Dede, and in this novel, most of the chapters are just a character name and a line next to it, without adding that comedic moment and the characters expression when Dylan sang a ridiculous hormone song or when Ryan sang a song that should let the characters have a respective POV and should feel a goosebumps and awestruck, however, author only writing about how the characters are tearing up a little bit but don't include how they are really feeling in depth, and instead only how the characters are chill about it and suggest to him that he sing it in a studio like that's a normal thing that Ryan just sang an impressive song, I mean, even though they are the Main Characters of the show, it doesn't mean that they aren't normal people, they are just a entertaining, funny and just like any ordinary family, they have misunderstanding of their own and solve their problems as a family so a song of Ryan should give them an awestruck expression like how they are dumbfounded when they hear Dylan song, if you watch the show though, too bad author just skips that funny part, anyways, atleast write about other characters POV, for example Alex, and how she really feels about Ryan and what is her thoughts about Ryan, about his genius mind and being a young entrepreneur, how cool he was to her and how Haley are envious of Alex and her POV and other characters such as Phil, for example: when he saw Ryan and he secretly though when he sees Ryan 'A snitch, A smarty pants, Ryan' and what other characters thoughts about Ryan and also even if it's unrelated to Ryan, it will definitely be a lot interesting to know about their POV about their partners or their family and what they are really feeling, especially with an addition of Ryan, it will not only make the story more alive but also will definitely be a refreshing change for the author and the readers. I'm not saying for the author to make it complicated, but I just feel that the author can improve and even he described the situation in a simple sentence and Characters funny expression, and also with other characters POV, especially what's their POV when they are finally reading Ryan's book and also write Ryan's book impressive scene when they're reading it or their reaction when they're watching Ryan's movie or series in detail. Besides that, everything's good, plot is good, I like the fanfic except it's lacking in what I mentioned above. Character design (3.0 ⭐): except for the characters of the show, the author chose to not give the OC's like Ryan's parents, especially his mom an appearance. I mean the appearance, her looks. What she looks like. And other oc characters looks, I don't have problem with the show characters not have a description in appearance since it's all good and we can Google it, however, an oc especially the agents or big six representative, atleast write they're wearing and what's their hair color, not important to be honest. So if the author doesn't want to, it's all good 👍. World background (4.9 ⭐): Well, obviously, the world background is in Modern Family and also similar to 'My Hollywood System' that's the world lacking in entertainment department, and with it is the convenience of the MC's knowledge of his past life and the system. It's a perfect world for opportunist. Overall rating: 4.4 ⭐

There are only a few errors where author changes from third to first person pov causing minor distraction and thus a 4 star on writing but in every other way this story is captivating, fun, intriguing and the delicious but tastefully expressed love scenes are naughty and nice.

Huh? Ryan? wtf? what's with this bullishit