lancelot and guinevere story

Already read on FF net. Totally love the story 👍👍 It would be great, if Guinevere show interest on shirou . Hopefully saber will show her 'jealous' and 'possessive' side more.

Its a nice story concept and its not that bad of a story however I believe you could have done much better. You should have researched more about the other characters since there are many inconsistencies. Firstly Merlin should have already been in his tower in Avalon since this should be the end of Artoria's reign. Vortigern also should have been defeated and killed considering canon Artoria was able to kill him I dont see how this OP Artoria would not be able to, I also find it hard to believe that some of the Knights of the Round would turn on Artoria there would have at least some that were loyal to her like Bedivere who if I recall was still loyal to him till his death. Lancelot also had no motive of betraying Artoria since the reason he betrayed her was because of his secret relationship with Guinevere so Artoria was forced to have her executed because if she didnt it would distabilise her reign with people having the opinion that shes weak willed, etc. Her political enemies would see that as a weakness that they could use against her. The reason Lancelot even recklessly attacked was because Guinevere would have been executed so he went and attacked which led to several deaths. Also wouldnt the rumors of her not being able to understand emotions not exist? You could have also started Artoria in the modern era like you wanted judging by your sypnosis and have the past events in like flashback in dreams if you want to be vague on what happened during her reign that way you dont need much research.

Listennnnnnnnnn....... the past three chapters are super hilarious.. literal tears😭😭😭🤣🤣🤣😂😂😂.. Guinevere and Agnes are going head to head.. Guinevere has a slight edge over Agnes at this time. ..😂😂😂.. Can't wait to see what the Knotty Omega will write.. sitting and anxiously awaiting the next chapters.. Thank you author for your play on words and scenes.. I'm thoroughly captivated... 🔥🔥🔥🔥

The story so far have me invested asf should totally read it, and the way the characters are introduced feels more natural too. Still love guinevere out of all the characters and it won’t change!

This is a review of the first two chapters. The story centers on Guinevere an immature little sister who thinks the world revolves around her. The heroine found out that her parents have arranged a marriage for her so she: 1) blames her older brother for not taking her place and 2) falls in love with a stranger she meets. Guinevere’s bratty behavior makes the reader question how she was raised especially after “meeting “ her brother. Guinevere’s brother response to his sister’s pain can be summarized as “so what?!” “I am in love!” “Praise me!” The female lead and her family are unlike able. The construction of the story is better than the content. The author is adept at transitioning between scenes. The separation between dialogue and description is clear. There are a few issues of verbs having the wrong tense. The author is good, so I hope the characters will become more like able.