creating a short story

Though the book is very interesting, the chapters are quite short and the releases slow. The story development is quite unpredictable thus creating good suspense. Thoroughly enjoying the reading though.

The story is good and intriguing, writing has small mistakes sometimes. Character building, introduction and especially fighting scenes are comprehensive creating utmost pleasure in reading and visuallizing. In short, a perfect novel.

The story build up your curiosity nicely, the short and sharp sentences do well at creating a dark undertone. The dialogue having little context in the beginning was a brilliant way to hook the reader.

the story is all over the place. it's just like some Chinese novels kill one enemy another one appears and power scaling is too bad, MC went from almost being killed by Croc to creating a universe by himself in a really short time the author was creating villains for MC forcefully like MC has so much power that almost no one can match then the author gives a lantern ring to Batman, creating a hollow vandal savage and so on it's too bad

The Emotionless Unforgettable Girl is a story with a lot of potential. I have a lot of experience on short-stories, and this is not the best but hopefully it will get better as it goes. By reading the beginning, the end will be quite a surprise to all the people who stay with this story until the end. Thank you for creating this series!