the straw that broke the camel's back story

Good idea, poor execution. Not trying to be rude but you also need to work on grammar... having our mc being called an ‘adventure’ instead of ‘adventurer’ multiple times in a row was the straw that broke the camel’s back here 😅.

subjective review. i don't like mc character because he's kinda naive about good and evil and what really broke the camel back is mc behavior when dealing with his ex-girlfriend, it remind me of yu xiaogang from soul land 1. it just not my cup of tea

I think this novel is still rated three stars too high. The novel goes from slightly promising to incomprehensible nonsense in record time. The first thing to deteriorate is the prose and grammar. Then it becomes a series of diary entries instead of a story. And finally, the decision-making of the Mc to just hand out serums like they're candy became the straw that broke the camel's back. If you read this, Author, I don't blame you for this. You are clearly an amateur learning to write. So use this as a learning experience, read more published novels by great authors, and watch more videos on how to write. Then rewrite this. Hope this serves as a warning for potential readers and as constructive criticism for the author.

The story is interesting, it's well written and I can't complain about the grammar. The world building is exceptional for a novel on webnovel, the premise of the story, although not a novel idea, is still quite good. I read up until the part where Aiwai appeared, as for me that straw broke the metaphorical camel's back. Up until this point the story was good, occasional plotholes aside, but that character was too stupid to continue reading this. That aside the story is quite good, if you have any time to kill, you might wanna give it a shot. Though, don't expect a master's work, as it really isn't. Still, solid work from the author and if he were to mend the few plotholes and stop writing annoying characters into the story, I do see a lot of potential for his next work.

"He yawned and stretches his arms in the air. " I think this line at the start of Chapter 47 was the figurative straw that broke the camel's back. Please, PLEASE decide if you're telling this story in past or present tense, because it's been painful as hell reading up to this point. The plot and characters are good, can even be great depending on where the story goes from where I've read. But you NEED to choose a tense (preferably past tense) and stick to it. If your editor hasn't pointed this out to you before, or if your editor is the reason for the changing tenses, you need to fire your editor. And if you don't have an editor, please please for all that is holy stop letting the awkward reading spoil something that can be really good and GET A GOOD EDITOR.