starcraft female protoss fanfic

The author has done a good job with inclusion of the StarCraft races. The Protoss are handled beautifully in my opinion. Keep up the good work. This is not a good translation.

Overall good. My recommendation would be to have your main character break away from the main StarCraft II story a couple of times, like he senses there is something very wrong with Narud, or has his own encounters with various Zerg or Protoss characters.

4 chapters and I give up. There is too little worldbuilding and descriptions. I couldn’t get a clear image of who he was, where he was, how his ship was and what he did. A lot of ’he did this or that because of this or that’ but with a bloated word count to say very little. Furthermore, the title is misleading, making you think it’s about Starcraft, with the terrans, zergs and protoss. But it isn’t. And of course, there is the unnecessary cultivation...

the best starcraft fanfic that I seen and has good potential, sadly got dropped tho . .

At first It was exciting to read this fic coz it was Starcraft in Starwars verse but as the fic goes on, for me its hard to understand and became convoluted at some point. I first thought like Starcraft game, build base, produce units, gather materials, buy heroes and again and again until he has enough manpower, that how I think he became powerhouse in Star Wars and build his own Empire or planet something typical kingdom building. But its not, author make it more realistic with little game mechanic on it. That's turn me off a little bit. I know its good to be careful but author make protoss careful at some point they look weak on some reader standpoint in order to hide they so called technologies and manpower to the point they were harass by other forces in galaxy and they do nothing and ignore just them. No showing a little power there so that they establish themselves as race that you can't mess around with. Sucks tho good thing author tells that MC has no skills in playing the war. It feels like the MC only there to summon the units and heroes in Starcraft to Starwars and let them be. Feels like he has no real power there and he only respect or follow by heroes because he summoned them and that's what their mind says like protocol other than that feels like MC before reincarnated didn't play Starcraft and only watching in sideline while someone playing Starcraft on some Internet cafe. And then comes down the latest chapter when he became Zerg, the Star Wars and Protoss arc didn't finish yet then MC became Zero in the process out of nowhere. Story development sucks to me especially I played Starcraft since launch. Well its my opinion anyway and heads up on future readers what to expect and what's inside this fanfic, goodluck anyway. This constructive criticism if authors weak minded will be deleted so does the rating I put on this fic cause that what it feels like it when I read this fic until latest chapter. What a letdown.