Born as the heir to the world's most powerful family of magicians, with a talent for magic that rivals that of the gods, Adall knew happiness only to have it forcibly ripped away from him shortly thereafter. Overnight, he would be banished from his family and condemned to a pathetic life of wandering. Or so it was supposed to happen... How did he become so powerful? Why am I unable to inflict even the slightest injury on him, even using my most powerful spells? Why must I lose to someone I could have killed with a mere murderous intent not long ago? His new calling will be to instill fear and despair in the hearts of his enemies.
The only thing that can be considered bad about this story is the fact that it is in 2nd person. Your stories are awesome but I feel not only bored but also irritated when I see so much 'you' in a paragraph. It would have been far better if it was in first or third person view. ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww ww