you can if you will the jerry kramer story

You can never go wrong with tom and Jerry

Thanks for the chapter, I recommended that if MS will create cartoons, you can Tom and Jerry or SpongeBob...............................................................................................................................................,...................................................................................................................................,............................................................ ............................................,...................,........................................,..........................................................................................

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for the tom and mc story is good we can see how tom &Jerry entertaining they are.

no story progression at all, you just turn readers off by boring them with u trying to make us empathize about jerry and jake from the get go. you shouldnt do that at the start, only do it when there is something at stake. I wouldnt pity jerry at all because we already know his nature so trying to force it without something at stake is just foolishness. tho aside from that you have a writing quality and there are no cringes.