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2022-01-22 07:18

Its an interesting story and I was drawn in from the start. I like how realistic it is. However the writing could be much better. Mainly the sentences, the sentences may as well be paragraphs. If the sentences were cut down some and there was more description then this would receive five stars.

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Thank you. The writing improves as the story progress in the later chapters.

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