"An everyday man gets thrown into the world of twilight thousands of years before the start of the plot. With immortality and incredible abilities. How will this man's presence change the outcome of the original story?" [ this is a slow-burn fanfiction; the MC is just trying to experience life and enjoy it, not to take over the world and rule from the shadows.] I do not own twilight or the characters of the twilight world, all that belongs to me are my own characters.
I dropped after a few chapters because the dialogue between Santana and Quinn was getting too snarky for me. It was just harsh quips back and forth. Kids don't do it all the time, and best friends have a language of their own. It was toxic. Otherwise, grammar and pacing was good.