The Last Heir of Merlin
"GO UP TO YOUR FUCKING ROOM!" A man, seething with anger, yelled at someone.
"Now Tristian, he is your son," a woman said as calmly as she could, standing in front of the boy.
"Not biologically he isn't! You had him when we got together, Diana!" Tristian said, not as loudly, but still booming throughout the house.
Diana turned around and knelt down, "Can you go up to your room, sweetie?" She asked and he nodded. The boy did go up the stairs, but he didn't go to his room. He instead sat down and the top step to listen to his parents yell at each other. Diana turned back to her husband, "He was left at my doorstep one morning almost Eleven years ago, Tristian, what was I supposed to do?"
"As of the current situation, I'd say you should've left it there!" He yelled back at his slowly-losing-her-patience wife.
"He. Not it, he. And he is our son. Just because he's different doesn't mean we can't love him," Diana said.
The Boy known as Jake Fernandes sat at the top of the stairs, crying as he listened to the people he had called his parents arguing. Right then he decided he could accept them not being his real parents because they looked after him for so long.
He suddenly heard a loud bang come from down the stairs. He stood up and hurried down to see his mother laying on the ground, red liquid slowly pooling around her still form. He gasped, tears flowing from his widened eyes, then looked up to his father and saw him holding a gun. His father aimed his gun at him, but before he could pull the trigger, he started gasping for air.
Tristian saw his son's eyes and they were glowing red. In his final moments, he knew that thing had to be born of the devil. There wasn't any way he could explain otherwise.
Jake watched as his fathers life was slowly drained from his eyes, clutching his throat the entire time. His body spasms ceded and his father lay still, just like his mother. The entire situation was gravely taxing on his psyche. His red eyes changed back to their Blue color and before he knew it, he fell forward, passing out from recent events.
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Halyx_Stark · Book&Literature
Its a nice story concept and its not that bad of a story however I believe you could have done much better. You should have researched more about the other characters since there are many inconsistencies. Firstly Merlin should have already been in his tower in Avalon since this should be the end of Artoria's reign. Vortigern also should have been defeated and killed considering canon Artoria was able to kill him I dont see how this OP Artoria would not be able to, I also find it hard to believe that some of the Knights of the Round would turn on Artoria there would have at least some that were loyal to her like Bedivere who if I recall was still loyal to him till his death. Lancelot also had no motive of betraying Artoria since the reason he betrayed her was because of his secret relationship with Guinevere so Artoria was forced to have her executed because if she didnt it would distabilise her reign with people having the opinion that shes weak willed, etc. Her political enemies would see that as a weakness that they could use against her. The reason Lancelot even recklessly attacked was because Guinevere would have been executed so he went and attacked which led to several deaths. Also wouldnt the rumors of her not being able to understand emotions not exist? You could have also started Artoria in the modern era like you wanted judging by your sypnosis and have the past events in like flashback in dreams if you want to be vague on what happened during her reign that way you dont need much research.