prophets novel

Writing: no paragraphs, no spacing between dialog, just a big bunch of text. Stability: this man has no life outside Story: help everybody! Me? Oh I don't count. (mc) Character: I kept reading, hoping that the MC will get better... NOPE! Just a moron with a system, that remains a moron (telling everybody that he's reincarnated; tells everybody about his cheats; No protections against seers, prophets; Gamer's Mind is nonexistent even though he has it; three systems combined and he does not use them properly; and some more that I can't remember right now) World: It's a fanfic. The world is already there.

Warning! this is a story for only indians. it started well until chapter 150 where the author started being biased on all other religions calling it man made, he goes to the length that he even put the Mc rewrite The quran and the bible. shrug i mean did he takes all Muslims and christian to have low iq that they will accept a book founded in a cave and started believing that it is the real one because it is written in the same language as that religions and suddenly all the world started believing it, the mc even started executing (murdering)the old Muslims just for the old one to be forgotten,if not a tyrant then what( even the prisoners and withnesses where murdered to clear all evidence.). and the thing about dharmic islam and christian make it worse that why i said this is a novel only for indians. if the holy books where easily tempered with then many emperor in the world would have put their names in the book as prophets or something.

It's pretty good. It started out very good, but after Harry awakened his x-gene it starts going downhill a little. He becomes too OP and it's as if everything's being handed to him on a silver platter. On top of that there's the introduction of the Ancient One, which seems to always be the point in mcu fanfics when they start to go downhill. I think it's the fact that she can see the future? it kinda takes the immersion out of it. There's a reason most fantasy literature depicts prophets' visions as very vague and hard to understand; because a character knowing every detail of the future takes all the fun out of the story. Anyways, not bad, but it starts to become very cliché while also not including any of the canon HP characters we all know and love.

Hello, I am a big fan of your writing. I wanted to make some suggestions that may help you with your writing. First, please don't make it a harem. I noticed that all the characters in the last chapters are girls and all of them are in love with the mc. a lot of fanfic are doing this and it's getting annoying, and in my opinion the mc personality isn’t a lovable character and thena will probably kill the other love interest . Secondly, don’t include religion. What I mean by that is don't introduce prophets and stuff like that. People will get offended. I did it once and it was a disaster. Thirdly, don’t focus too much on world war one and world war two. A lot of fanfic covers that story if you want to introduce people in that period of time, sure but avoid it if possible. keep it up i really love your work and am looking forward to the next chapter.

The review is just my opinion... The author is following the future knowledge of movie/original book/Canon storyline which has less variety of details and it will be boring 😴😴😴 and should consider other HP fanfics in fanfiction.net or other HP world fanfics for more diverse world building... Eg. the muggle born should visit for St mungos for various vaccination and political power also plays a major role like potter family's heir ring or something and many more possibilities... The Mc should analyse the future and major problems and take necessary counters eg daily prophets Rita& MoM (ministry), helping sirius black.... The author should consider the Canon knowledge like guidelines and should not be afraid to change things... And plan for the worst case scenario.... This is a fanfics so the author can bring his own element of surprise/scenarios.... 😉 As far as ch 13 the story is good and even if it's the Canon storyline the fanfics is interesting and waiting for more chapters😊😊😊 My personal opinion I hate Ron's friendship.. So please deport him into another universe 😒😒😒