ian hunter defiance part 2 fiction
Once upon a time, I had thought that the worst thing to ever happen to me was being abducted by aliens. It turns out that wasn’t the case at all. The worst thing to have ever happened was to be betrayed by the one thing you needed to survive. After the Alliance fell, my AI powered ship released me from the lab I had been in for the past few months. Not wanting to look like the monster I knew him to be, Lucifer sold me to a pleasure station, hoping that I would die a quick and painful death. He should have had a conversation with my parents before he did that. At least then, he could have been assured that I was nothing if not a constant source of disappointment. Instead of dying, I lived in that hell for almost a year before a military operation took out the pleasure station and all of us poor females with it. Thinking that this was my chance at freedom and a life of my own, I was sorely disappointed to find myself back in yet another cage. Swimming in a pool in the center of my new cage, staring up at the gold bars surrounding me, I waited. For freedom or death, I really didn’t know, but I waited. All I had ever wanted was to be part of a world, to find that one place in all the universe that belonged to me. But unlike my mermaid namesake, I had no witch to grant me my wish, no Prince Charming to save me. That was… until they showed up and killed my owner. They told me that they could take me anywhere in the known universe. I just had to ask. The problem was I had no idea where to go. I had no home and no way back to Earth. But that didn’t stop them from showing me the universe. And then, one day, I found it. The one place I could call home. It was their world... and all I wanted to be was part of it. However, before I could call it mine, I had to fight for it. Jokes on them. I’d been fighting my whole life, and now, I finally found something worth fighting for. You can run. You can hide. But if you fuck with me and mine… You best be prepared to die. My name is Ariel. Let me show you my new world. --- This is a dark novel with a dark beginning, please pay attention to the trigger warnings! Trigger Warnings: Sexual Assault (Past and Present) Physical Assault Child Bride Abusive parents Thoughts of suicide Cults (high religious content) ----- Reverse Harem, no MM Part of the Star's Ships Universe (With cross over to some of the other novels) ----- Other Novels: Rebirth In the Apocalypse: Third Time's A Charm (Completed) Fight, Flight, or Freeze: The Healer's Story (Completed) Star's Ships (Completed) Dancing with Monsters (Completed) As Silent As A Mouse (Completed) Be Careful What You Wish For: A Zombie Apocalypse Novel (Completed) The Witch In The Woods: The Transmigration of Hazel-Anne Davis (Ongoing) Seraphina's Revenge (Ongoing) Discord ID: devilbesideyou666 Discord Chanel: https://discord.gg/rFfuaqFQFN
hello, what i'm going to write and say are just tips that i think will be useful to improve this story. I read a lot of novels and mangas which are both excellent and bad. I then wondered why some market and others not. I learned that the emptying of information was situational, that is to say that the information given to us serves the present moment therefore easier to understand. In this fan-fiction and even in several fan-fiction, even if we know the powers and rules of the fan-fiction because we know the original story, the authors give us their information without any reason. For my opinion, I think you gave us his information to make us understand that he knows the world of Hunter x Hunter but there is another way to make us understand that he knows this world. The other way for me, is to describe the place of residence, he lives in Meteor City, show us that he lives there with the specificity that Meteor City has shown in the manga. Then it's the MC, the MC is quite interesting and ambitious but at the same time not interesting. Let me explain, telling us the general objective of the character is good but telling us all its little details that I must be friends with this one or kill this one is not interesting, show it to us. I don't like to hear the thoughts of the characters, I rather prefer to see their actions so that I can understand their thoughts for myself. Now let's talk about the Hunter x Hunter fan-fiction part. I have read several Hunter x Hunter fan fiction and have noticed that many authors have failed to capture the essence of Hunter x Hunter, the fighting. From my understanding the fights in Hunter x Hunter are separated into 2 parts: - The physical part where you use the power of your Hatsu to win. - The reflection part where we try to decipher the opponent's Hatsu to win. And it is this second part that many authors forget. To work on this second part I advise you to review his first fight against the Ancient. I don't take into account the second fight against the elder because the MC won only thanks to his improvement of his Hastu and not by understanding in depth the Hastu of the Elder. Here I hope it could help improve this story because I read it myself and I want to read a better way of it.