goku chichi sex fanfic

Good start to the story, see the following to see the changes and improvements of goku and its development. No HAMEM just chichi as in the original story.

This had so much potential. Chapter 1-29 is the best the story gets. All downhill from there. The author forgets they had goku training with a shell from day one and being MUCH stronger than Canon. As in the OG Goku Kamehameha can blow up a car this on almost blew up Fire Mountain. But still collapse from training with a 20kg turtle shell at the same rate as ChiChi and Krillin. They also keep trying to force the ChiChi Goku ship regardless of how many time Goku express his disinterest. As much as I like the Odea of a GokuxBulma fic, just read/watch OG Dragonball. The grammar seems to be good so there is that. I just wish the original premise was more visible.

after, is done traveling to the other worlds we know off. will stop or develop relationships between him and people from the different worlds. just please don't let Goku marry chichi, no hated her.

You have a good start when you write this fanfic but after you skip too much plot, it became boring. I mean, you make summary of dragonball from bulma meet goku till goku got married in 1 chapter with several time skip. Even after that you still make another 5 or 10 years time skip. You writes a fanfic of a novel, so if you use time skip it becomes summary of the original novel not a fanfic anymore and everyone can write summary. And why MC have to babysitter goku and became sidechara? If he want to get stronger he have to beat strong opponent not to be a bystander. You write and give goku more scene than your own MC. it is MC not sidechara. He even suddenly got a harem. You never mentioned about chichi, how comes she suddenly be one of his harem? If you want make harem at least give some reasonable plot. i hope you can be better, but i'm sorry to stop at ch.20. (Sorry, English not my first language so there are a lot of mistake)

For prospective readers. Basically the situation is this. Bulma and Chichi are with Vegeta and Goku respectively. Vegito has memories of being with them but has no feelings towards either, just appreciating towards their beauty and that's it. To some this is Ntr, but it is not since Vegito was never in love with them. Hopefully this cleared it up to those who are thinking of reading or not. Cheers!