You have a good start when you write this fanfic but after you skip too much plot, it became boring. I mean, you make summary of dragonball from bulma meet goku till goku got married in 1 chapter with several time skip. Even after that you still make another 5 or 10 years time skip. You writes a fanfic of a novel, so if you use time skip it becomes summary of the original novel not a fanfic anymore and everyone can write summary. And why MC have to babysitter goku and became sidechara? If he want to get stronger he have to beat strong opponent not to be a bystander. You write and give goku more scene than your own MC. it is MC not sidechara. He even suddenly got a harem. You never mentioned about chichi, how comes she suddenly be one of his harem? If you want make harem at least give some reasonable plot. i hope you can be better, but i'm sorry to stop at ch.20. (Sorry, English not my first language so there are a lot of mistake)
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Well there wasnt too much plot to begin with. But ok
