naruto crying shikamaru fanfic

Pretty good writing. Really like the idea of being reborn as Shikamaru, as he is my favorite character of Naruto Universe. Although i read in another review of this fanfic that this is just a translation of an already existing russian novel.

I like your story about naruto smurfing into the past, however, the fact that naruto told sasuke and shikamaru about he came from the future doesn't make any sense and could destroy his plan. I do not like it. you should make sasuke and shikamaru forget all about it with a memory erase jutsu or something. please, that scene really bothers me alot and naruto is suppose to keep this as a secret. I would understand if 3rd hokage sama would know instead of sasuke and shikamaru. Even if shikamaru could slowly develop a theory about what he saw on naruto, you should have let naruto keep it as a secret and naruto should have excused something else when he knock off sasuke, like "its a genjutsu". its easy that way cause its very dumb to let sasuke and shikamaru know that hes from the future. besides he can finish off the prevention of war by himself

Thanks for the chapter, your fanfic I like a lot. I like the fanfic because there are not many like Shikamaru as the main one or at least I just read it. the usual is an oc or reload as Naruto or Kakashi. and that of the nara clan as a clan specialized only in murders is great it would be something like hitman in short your fanfic is great

"The thing I hate the most in Naruto fanfics is when they don't put Naruto in Team 7. That alone completely changes the story and its course. And honestly, the last thing I care about are characters like Choji, Hinata, or Shikamaru."

nice job but should the main character be a bit more hot-tempered and wild like Wolverine. shikamaru and choji are also friends with Naruto as usual, their love affair is ino wild boy and delicate princess