steve leaves tony and peter fanfiction

The writing needs more polishing. Learn to describe character or any background properly. The story basically changed Tony into a hick and everything else follows the movie. There are a lot of confusing sentences like " Steve read the book". Is it really Steve or is it Howard? Even when Tony is being confused with Steve. Reread every chapter that you write and ensure it's quality.

So, for those who want to read, here is my review (Although I didn't like the way this fanfiction went through, you can like it.): 1. I started to dislike this fanfiction because of the feeling of Uncanny Valley this FF book gave me. The MC first was human, then he reincarnated as a Symbiote then he kills and consumes Peter Parker (memories, feelings, everything.) and starts to... live as Peter Parker? Dude... It was almost as if I was reading The Thing Marvel Edition. If MC consumes Tony Stark in the future, is he Tony Stark too? 2. The second reason is that... He went after the girlfriend of the guy he just consumed and became him as if it was a matter of fact... Bro, it was creepy, to say the least. It felt like reading that comic where Dr. Octopus swapped minds with Peter Parker and became Spider-Man while leaving Peter to die in his old body... ( A comic I don't remember the name but I hate it so much I still remember. ) This is also strange since I don't feel the same way when reincarnations happen in other Fanfiction, I guess I convinced myself that the MC is simply the past life of the current body or something. This FF is quite good if you don't feel the uncanny feeling or just ignore it.

I liked the premise, the beginning, and parts of the story overall. The problem is that we have Maggie Stark as the protagonist, who has been shown to be someone who could be Tony Stark(her brother)‘s equal or near equal. THEN she also has the super soldier serumn like Steve or Bucky, with all the training HYDRA could provide, such as the Red Room like Natasha. Why is that bad? It isn’t. Until her presence in the MCU does basically nothing to change how the story goes. Major events stay basically the same, except some have an extra person in it- such as when going into the past to get the infinity stones, she joins Steve, stands there while he gets the scepter, rushes off to help with the cube, gets slapped by past-Hulk, rushes back to see Steve basically defeat past-Steve, knocks out past-Steve, and then has to go with Steve and Tony to the past. WHERE she follows Tony to get the cube, and nothing changes… except she’s in the scene. Her role in this story amounts to basic emotional support to the Avengers and Bucky. Of course that’s downplaying it a bit to make summarization easier, but still… she’s by no means fulfilling the role cut out for her. She doesn’t even do the snap instead of Tony, so all I can think of her being there is to give Bucky a happy ending, and help Pepper raise Morgan. Of course, a lot of that is just expectations vs reality. It’s just disappointing there. Overall a good novel though.