anakin and ahsoka kiss fanfiction

Very well written and the beginning is very interesting! Good Star Wars fanfiction is very hard to come by, especially in my favorite genre (time travel/reincarnation/etc). Then I see a time travel fic with Ahsoka as the MC and I'm so excited. Hope she can fix what went wrong with Anakin as well as the clones. Good work!

loving the story. I am guessing this is a Russian translation like your other. I like how hes using armor and he actually looking for tactics. Will he get the chips removed from his clones? this is a great story so far is hope you continue.

This story has a lot of potential. IT’s hard finding good Anakin centered stories in fanfiction and Webnovel. I look forward to when the story starts opening up.

This fanfic is not just a failure — it’s an open insult to everything Anakin Skywalker stands for. The author has clearly missed the entire emotional core of Star Wars and instead turned a complex, tragic character into a shallow, power-hungry warlord whose heart can be swayed by the first alien woman who offers him a throne. You have the audacity to show Anakin’s perfect dream — his mother alive, Padmé and the children safe, Obi-Wan at peace, Ahsoka still a Jedi — and then you make him throw that all away in the same chapter just because some DC war empress says, “Let’s rule the galaxy together.” That’s not a twist — that’s character assassination. Padmé’s love, Anakin’s fall, the weight of his pain — all of that is tossed aside like garbage. You didn’t write Darth Vader. You wrote an edgy OC in a helmet. The writing is shallow, the emotional beats are nonexistent, and the tone is closer to fan service than storytelling. Even Maxima is reduced to a plot device — a cheap “Padmé replacement” with none of the depth, only used to prop up Vader as a romantic fantasy. This isn’t dark. This isn’t tragic. It’s a parody of power fantasies wrapped in stolen Star Wars skin. If George Lucas read this, he’d either laugh or cry — and neither would be good for you. Fix your story. Or at least, admit it has nothing to do with Anakin Skywalker anymore.

original start and I hope she lives. always blamed anakin for her death. all he had to do to save her was have padme get her and let her live on naboo. but he just forgets her and the flips out when she dies. leaves her as a slave and never comes back but always gets pissed about slavery. i also w8ndered how his suit has environmentalcontrols to cool him so why can he feal wind blowing through it... suit should keep him warm since it kept him cool....I rambled sorry. so grammar is good so far. story is strong with no cliche so far... has lots of potential. i dont usually 5 star since most peeps just ignore 5 star post and look at lower for a reasonable description but just had to toss it out this time. i have been missing a good SI. since he is in his swtor character (I think) would be good if he gets memories about abilities and bases or rescource cache locations for goodies of old republic era gear.