boy on a train short story

I’m just giving it 5 stars cause it’s Soldier Boy he my favorite character In order 1.Soldier Boy 2.Homelander 3.Butcher 4. A-Train 5. The Peak (funny as hell)

It does needs a beta to help fix the grammar of the story, but beyond that I like it. The military of this world is bound to fail if that's the way they train, but I don't care that much about them. I care about the four MC of this story. A vampire boy, and three in one boy. Lol

I honestly like the story but it is not much different from the of and the only reason for this review is that gin is a ***** boy and won’t train hard like you could train and go out but no this ***** just go out and have fun and not handle his girls and forgive them too much and the fact that he is not serious about thing make want to kill this mc.

This novel reminds me of a more ***** Pokémon world. Monster or tamed companions battles it out but suffer real wounds and death. It follows a story of a boy who get one pet then starts to train and capture others so he can grow stronger and independent.

God damn it I like the story but why so short, not only that my app doesn't work on webnovels. It took me 1 day to finish 73 chapters on an other site. Oh and cool thing that you made the mc train he should be more more foreword and train a lot. But would it be better if the spoke to Alfa for the changes in the system? And why it changed.